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  1. Posted: November 21, 2016In: Family

    During the second year of a dictator?s reign in the Philippines where every Filipino wants him dead, he was murdered. The suspect: his 10-year-old son.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on November 22, 2016 at 1:07 pm

    FWIW: ?when I keep "nagging" about a logline, it's a sign that I, for one, ?sense a potential gem of an idea -- but it's needs cutting and polishing. So I think the logline (and perhaps the premise) needs more work. ?Assuming the lead character is the 10 year old son, what becomes his objective as aRead more

    FWIW: ?when I keep “nagging” about a logline, it’s a sign that I, for one, ?sense a potential gem of an idea — but it’s needs cutting and polishing.

    So I think the logline (and perhaps the premise) needs more work. ?Assuming the lead character is the 10 year old son, what becomes his objective as a result of the murder of his father? ?What is his response to being the prime but innocent suspect? ? Or is he the actual murderer?

    IOW: What is this story really about? ?The consequences that follow from his murdering his fathear? ?Or is it a murder mystery where he must exonerate himself, find the real murderer?

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  2. Posted: November 21, 2016In: Family

    During the second year of a dictator?s reign in the Philippines where every Filipino wants him dead, he was murdered. The suspect: his 10-year-old son.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on November 22, 2016 at 7:05 am

    >because it?s fiction?So? ?It still has to be have a sense of verisimilitude, ?present a credible version of the world as we ?currently know it. ?Unless, it's specifically stated that the story is a fantasy or science fiction -- those genres can take greater liberties with reality as we know it.Read more

    >because it?s fiction?

    So? ?It still has to be have a sense of verisimilitude, ?present a credible version of the world as we ?currently know it. ?Unless, it’s specifically stated that the story is a fantasy or science fiction — those genres can take greater liberties with reality as we know it. ? Or the logline reader is given to know that the story is set in a fictional future where the country is now ruled by a royal family.

    However, the genre for this logline is stipulated as “family”.

    And the logline says “a dictator’s reign” not “a king’s reign”. ? Well, which is it?

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  3. Posted: November 21, 2016In: Noir

    After her first love dies, a taxi driver on her way to sign divorce papers is showed what might have been when different versions of her younger self appear as subsequent passengers in her cab.

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    Added an answer on November 21, 2016 at 11:53 pm

    I can sense the makings of an interesting story. ?But ?it seems to me that stories facing forward in time with expectations of ?what ?might be are usually more effective and appealing than stories facing backwards in time with regrets about might have been.Even when stories flashback or reference thRead more

    I can sense the makings of an interesting story. ?But ?it seems to me that stories facing forward in time with expectations of ?what ?might be are usually more effective and appealing than stories facing backwards in time with regrets about might have been.

    Even when stories flashback or reference the past, the dramatic question is: ?what difference does it make? ?What changes as a result? (Drama is about change, not stasis.) ?What must the protagonist do going forward with her life? ?Consider Dickens’ “A Christmas Carol”. ?Why is it such an enduring and popular masterpiece? ?Because Ebenezer Scrooge’s is forced to see events in his past, about the life he might have lived if only he had chosen differently. The plot of the story is about what he must do in the future ?to redeem his past.

    What is the destination of the plot of this premise? ?And what are the stakes? ?(Again, Dickens, his use of a stake character in “A Christmas Carol”: ?if Scrooge doesn’t reform his ways, Tiny Tim will ?die.)

    Suffice to say I’m intrigued by the idea but not exactly hooked — yet.

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