1. Posted: November 23, 2016In:

    Healing from the car accident that killed her husband, the young author purchases a mysterious antique mirror and falls in love with the handsome reflection who tells her fascinating stories of daring and adventure and betrayal.

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    Tells fascinating stories to what dramatic end? ? What's the dramatic problem to be solved? ? The logline seems to suggest a string-of-pearls type of narrative rather than a causal one constituting a plot.What's the plot that arises from these circumstances. ?What becomes the author's objective goalRead more

    Tells fascinating stories to what dramatic end? ? What’s the dramatic problem to be solved? ? The logline seems to suggest a string-of-pearls type of narrative rather than a causal one constituting a plot.

    What’s the plot that arises from these circumstances. ?What becomes the author’s objective goal? ?Who or what opposes that goal? ?What’s at stake, which is to say what does she stand to gain by succeeding lose by failing.

    Scheherazade told fascinating stories, too. A 1,001 of them. To solve an immediate dramatic problem: prevent the king from killing her, to stay alive. ?What’s the Scheherazade factor in this story?

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  2. Posted: November 22, 2016In:

    When a witch who is also a medical doctor is left with three days to raise his daughter from the dead, he enlists the help of an ameteur witch who has three days to save her mother from a deadly disease.

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    Why would the warlock call upon an?amateur? ? ? Why doesn't he solicit the help of a pro? And if the protagonist is the warlock, he seems to be completely helpless, utterly dependent on an amateur, who, in any event,?has a more immediate and personal problem than helping the warlock. ?Other than begRead more

    Why would the warlock call upon an?amateur? ? ? Why doesn’t he solicit the help of a pro?

    And if the protagonist is the warlock, he seems to be completely helpless, utterly dependent on an amateur, who, in any event,?has a more immediate and personal problem than helping the warlock. ?Other than beg the witch to help him raise his daughter even if it kills her mother –but why would the witch want to risk the life of her mother by taking the time to help the warlock? ?What’s in it for the amateur witch?

    Who is the real protagonist here, the warlock or the witch?

    Whatever, the motivational math just doesn’t add up for me.

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: November 22, 2016In:

    Set against the backdrop of the social and political upheaval of the late 1800s in Europe, Mary is an unconventional and annoyingly intelligent woman struggling to alter the destiny and education of her gender – and still find love.

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    Good advice from Richiev. ?The concept needs fleshing out with specifics. ?"Struggling to alter the the destiny and education of her gender" -- how does that translate into a specific objective goal? And what is the inciting incident that triggers her struggle to achieve that goal? ?What are her perRead more

    Good advice from Richiev. ?The concept needs fleshing out with specifics. ?”Struggling to alter the the destiny and education of her gender” — how does that translate into a specific objective goal? And what is the inciting incident that triggers her struggle to achieve that goal? ?What are her personal stakes — what does she stand to lose if she fails?

    I think the story would have a stronger hook if based upon the life of a real historical character, a woman who willfully violated the social conventions of her time, defied the odds to forger her own career. ?Truth is stranger and often more compelling than fiction.

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