To me”save her” is obvious. ?If saving her entails breaking his moral code then he’s going to have to resort to violent and illegal means to rescue her from the hangman’s noose.

As written, the logline seems to suggest a story line where the audience has to wait (30 minutes)… and wait (60 minutes)… and wait (90 minutes?) while he makes up his mind. ?If that is the case, what is going on during all that time to keep them waiting and interested in the outcome? ? ?The western genre raises certain expectations about action and conflict, and I see none of those expectations being realized until ?he makes up his mind, and I don’t know how long that is going to take. ?Or what’s going to happen of dramatic interest — which is to say what is going to keep an audience interested in the story — while waiting for him to decide.

?How does he go about making up his mind (besides traveling ?cross country to see her)?

And then (surprise, surprise!) if he decides to save her, the question arises: ?can he save her? ?He’s only a preacher. ?Or is he an ex-gunslinger turned preacher, someone who has the skill set to credibly rescue her?

And will an audience buy into his choice to free her?

And if he’s successful, then how is she going to stay free? ?More than ever, she’s a wanted outlaws with a price on her head? How can he go back to preaching? ?He’s an outlaw, too, now, a wanted man?

What is the story really about? ?Making up his mind? ?Or the consequences that follow after he makes up his mind?

I’m guessing there is an implied causal ?link between his father’s parole and the stripper going missing, but I’m not sure. ?And I shouldn’t have to guess. ? The causal link, if it?exists, should be unambiguous in the logline.

Whatever, the logline sets up a situation for a potentially interesting plot, but unfortunately doesn’t ?fulfill the purpose of a logline which is to concisely delineate a plot. ?Specifically, it doesn’t lay out his objective goal: ?as a result of these 2 events, what becomes his objective goal? ?It is not enough to tell how he feels (“grief plus rage”); ?it’s necessary to state what he does about it, how he acts on those feelings.

What does he do as a result of his rage and grief that producess “perilous consequences”?

You may want to check out the “Training” option at the top of the web page for guidelines how to write an industry standard logline.

fwiw