1. Posted: September 7, 2016In:

    An Introvert, fed up with his mediocre life, runs off and ends up in a twisted experiment, his girlfriend must then find and save him from his own brainwashed mind before he is lost forever.

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    As FFF said. ?Whose story is it? ?Who is the protagonist?Also the nature of the experiment needs to be made specific. ?How was he brain washed? ?What exactly happens to him that puts him in jeopardy?Finally, ?as a card-carrying introvert (and ?content and proud), I take a special interest in storiesRead more

    As FFF said. ?Whose story is it? ?Who is the protagonist?

    Also the nature of the experiment needs to be made specific. ?How was he brain washed? ?What exactly happens to him that puts him in jeopardy?

    Finally, ?as a card-carrying introvert (and ?content and proud), I take a special interest in stories where a principal character is portrayed as an introvert. ?Taking this logline at face value, my 1st impression is that the logline plays into the negative stereotype of introverts. ? Introversion has its own unique strengths, ?albeit sometimes challenging to portray in cinema, I grant you.

    I hope I’m wrong, that you have enough (personal?) knowledge and understanding of introversion to portray the character with sympathy, insight and authenticity. ?

    Just saying.

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  2. Posted: September 6, 2016In:

    When the lands fairest Princess father is killed and throne taken by an Evil Suitor, her exiled mother she never knew returns to teach her the magical arts to take back her Kingdom

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    For the record,??I would ?prefer ?a story with a strong female character who prevails against evil by sheer dint of courage and intelligence. ?Like?Princess Elizabeth Tudor. Whose claim to lasting glory in English history?is how she outwitted and defeated all her opponents and claimants with her witRead more

    For the record,??I would ?prefer ?a story with a strong female character who prevails against evil by sheer dint of courage and intelligence. ?Like?Princess Elizabeth Tudor. Whose claim to lasting glory in English history?is how she outwitted and defeated all her opponents and claimants with her wits. ?That’s why they keep making movies about her illustrious reign.

    When the protagonist has sole or privileged access to the supernatural, where’s the risk? ?Where’s the suspense? ?She has access to all the high cards; it’s a no-brainer that eventually she’ll figure out how to play them in the 3rd Act and defeat the antagonist who is handicapped, who only holds the low cards of merely natural power and ability.

    IMHO: ?if you’re going to give the princess access to a bag of magical tricks, then than the antagonist/usurper should also have access to a bag of magical tricks. ?Pit feminine magic against masculine magic.

    Can anyone think of a “magical” story where only the protagonist ?has access to the supernatural or extraordinary power? ?I suggest taking a cue from the Star Wars saga, George Lucas was savvy enough to “gift” ?both Darth Vader and Luke Skywalker ?with the Force.

    The rest is franchise history. (And if you’re going to transform your female character, in effect, into a super-hero, then you ought to be thinking of the franchise potential for the concept.)

    My 2.5 cents worth.

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  3. Posted: September 6, 2016In:

    When the lands fairest Princess father is killed and throne taken by an Evil Suitor, her exiled mother she never knew returns to teach her the magical arts to take back her Kingdom

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    The logline needs to clearly indicate who gets the nod as the protagonist.Must the daughter learn the supernatural arts from her mother? ?Or must the mother teach her daughter the supernatural arts? ?When it comes to casting, who gets top billing and pay, who gets the supporting role -- those are noRead more

    The logline needs to clearly indicate who gets the nod as the protagonist.

    Must the daughter learn the supernatural arts from her mother? ?Or must the mother teach her daughter the supernatural arts? ?When it comes to casting, who gets top billing and pay, who gets the supporting role — those are not equivalent questions.

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