1. Posted: July 27, 2016In:

    When he invents inter-dimensional video messaging, a friendless whiz kid hides his discovery from his loud and obnoxious adult colleagues to develop a friendship with an alien delinquent in peace (and quiet).

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    A premise in search of a plot.And what distinguishes this from E.T.? ? I mean there is a slightly different set up, but a similar situation emotional predicament in terms of the kid's relationship to the alien.

    A premise in search of a plot.

    And what distinguishes this from E.T.? ? I mean there is a slightly different set up, but a similar situation emotional predicament in terms of the kid’s relationship to the alien.

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  2. Posted: July 27, 2016In:

    A cyber security analyst must steal the government’s undercover handler list when a hacker threatens to remotely crash his wife’s plane.

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    >>>commit treasonWhat kind of treason?And: ?some hero. ?(Not.) ??Heroes do the right thing. ?Not the expedient thing. ?That is, if you want the audience to root for him.If what you have in mind is that he's going to fake or delay committing treason while he struggles to save his wife (and tRead more

    >>>commit treason

    What kind of treason?

    And: ?some hero. ?(Not.) ??Heroes do the right thing. ?Not the expedient thing. ?That is, if you want the audience to root for him.

    If what you have in mind is that he’s going to fake or delay committing treason while he struggles to save his wife (and the lives l the other innocents on the plane), okay. ?But that’s not what the logline seems to say.

    Just because the audience will sympathize with a collateral innocent victim (his wife in this case) doesn’t mean they will sympathize and root for the protagonist who does the wrong thing, ?that they will absolve him of treasonous acts that could inflict injury and death on an entire country — far more people than his wife, or the other passengers on the plane.

    This was one reason why the denouement of “The Counselor” , which I posted a logline for 2 days ago, was so unsatisfactory. ?I pitied the wife who becomes collateral damage as a result of the lawyer doing a lucrative drug deal. ?But her fate did not make me pity the lawyer. ?He was not a particularly sympathetic nor compelling character to begin with, and her lamentable fate as a result of his illegal acts only made me like him less.

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  3. Posted: July 27, 2016In:

    When her mad-scientist sister finds a way to channel through to her autistic son’s mind, a desperate mother finds out it eventually let a door open to another realm.

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    >>>her objective goal would be to ?close the door before it?s too late? (monsters from the other realm invade).That objective goal is framed as a negative, what the mother must prevent -- an invasion. ?And it seems to be an incomplete resolution of the dramatic problem.Closing the door mayRead more

    >>>her objective goal would be to ?close the door before it?s too late? (monsters from the other realm invade).

    That objective goal is framed as a negative, what the mother must prevent — an invasion. ?And it seems to be an incomplete resolution of the dramatic problem.

    Closing the door may be a necessary milestone in the plot — it removes the threat ?of the monsters– ?but it ?leaves her son back where he — and the story — started, ?in autistic isolation. ?If that’s where the film ends, then the story leaves the audience with an unsatisfactory non-resolution of the core dramatic problem.?

    Wouldn’t the solution to the dramatic problem of her son’s isolation entail finding a way to use the channel into his mind ?to rescue him not just from the monsters, but from his isolation? ?Shouldn’t that be the overarching objective goal?

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