1. Posted: July 26, 2016In:

    After she’s betrayed doing a one time mission for the government, a broke data smuggler must decode the data packet encrypted in her brain to use as a bargaining chip for her life.

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    Now the concept is getting interesting. The logline is vaguely similar to the premise of the 1995 movie "Johnny Mnemonic", a William Gibson adaptation of his own short story. ?It's about a courier who transports secure data packages in his brain. However, I think the concept was poorly executed in tRead more

    Now the concept is getting interesting.

    The logline is vaguely similar to the premise of the 1995 movie “Johnny Mnemonic”, a William Gibson adaptation of his own short story. ?It’s about a courier who transports secure data packages in his brain.

    However, I think the concept was poorly executed in the 1995 movie. ?And now it’s so out of date with current technology. ?But ?the concept is so cool, it’s time for a rethink, a reboot.

    For me the hook of your story would be using humans as couriers to transmit super-sensitive encrypted data packages because the Internet is hopelessly riddled with security holes. ?(Which it is and will be despite all the patchwork solutions.)

    So I ?suggest you continue to refocus and polish your idea. ?As I said, somebody’s going to reboot the premise. May it be your story that gets the green light.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: July 26, 2016In:

    When an honest criminal lawyer is tempted by a lucrative one time drug deal only to have it go sour, he must fight to save the woman he loves from the revenge of a merciless cartel.

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    This is the best salvage job I could do on the plot of the movie.?IMHO, this is a film that might have benefited from some serious pre-production logline vetting.The script was written by Cormac McCarthy, the author of "No Country for Old Men", a brilliant novel, superbly adapted for the screen by tRead more

    This is the best salvage job I could do on the plot of the movie.?IMHO, this is a film that might have benefited from some serious pre-production logline vetting.

    The script was written by Cormac McCarthy, the author of “No Country for Old Men”, a brilliant novel, superbly adapted for the screen by the Coen brothers. ??So “The Counselor” ?was a sure thing, right? ? Look at the roster of A-list talent who apparently thought so: ?Ridley Scott, Michael Fassbender, Penelope Cruz, Javier Bardem, Penelope Cruz, Brad Pitt.

    Actually, my logline is a puff piece. ?The protagonist doesn’t put up a fight when the deal goes sour. ? Nor do his “business associates”– they all flee for their lives. ? He tries to talk (aka: beg) his way out, while trying to get his fiancee out of town before the cartel takes out their revenge on him by killing the person he loves most.

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  3. Posted: July 25, 2016In:

    To stop the government weaponising a clean energy formula, a rebellious scientist uploads it into her mind and must find a suitable donor for the formula before it fades away forever.

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    What's the difference between "upload" and old-fashioned "memorize"?And how will "uploading" stop the big bad government from its malevolent purposes? ?When I upload pictures, say to Tumblr or Flickr, the source files don't disappear on my computer.And ?if the source file were erased what's to stopRead more

    What’s the difference between “upload” and old-fashioned “memorize”?

    And how will “uploading” stop the big bad government from its malevolent purposes? ?When I upload pictures, say to Tumblr or Flickr, the source files don’t disappear on my computer.

    And ?if the source file were erased what’s to stop the person or people who devised the formula from recreating it from memory? ?Or hard copy? ?Or restoring it from backup?

    I just don’t see how “uploading” achieves her purpose of denying others the formula.

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