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  1. Posted: July 8, 2016In: Thriller

    When a bitten-to-death passenger is found dead in his cabin, a dad with son-issues aspires to catch the killer and redeem himself to his son.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on July 8, 2016 at 11:08 am

    And furtherless, if your going to do a story that's heavy on relationship, ?you might want to think about ?making the detective a woman.Men ?go for action; women for relationship.Call that a stereotype; call me a sexist pig; ?I'm just calling it as I read the demographic readouts on IMDB . ?(And womRead more

    And furtherless, if your going to do a story that’s heavy on relationship, ?you might want to think about ?making the detective a woman.

    Men ?go for action; women for relationship.

    Call that a stereotype; call me a sexist pig; ?I’m just calling it as I read the demographic readouts on IMDB . ?

    (And women lead characters are so grossly underrepresented in movies. It’s scandalous.)

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  2. Posted: July 8, 2016In: Thriller

    When a bitten-to-death passenger is found dead in his cabin, a dad with son-issues aspires to catch the killer and redeem himself to his son.

    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on July 8, 2016 at 10:16 am

    >>>I just find it difficult to capture a whole story in a single sentence.Yeah, that's frustrating. ?But given the constraints...I don't know how much you know from 1st hand observation or experience with detective work or how much research you've done but the following stream of ?randomizeRead more

    >>>I just find it difficult to capture a whole story in a single sentence.

    Yeah, that’s frustrating. ?But given the constraints…

    I don’t know how much you know from 1st hand observation or experience with detective work or how much research you’ve done but the following stream of ?randomized thoughts are is based upon my own experience working for the LAPD.

    First of all, independent of his son, he’s got to solve the murder because first and foremost that’s his professional duty. ?That’s what he does, that’s what he’s good at.

    Also, in order to solve the murder, he’s got to sacrifice quality time with his son, right? (I assume the son is also on the voyage). ?Which I should think the son would resent. ?

    So, the murder would initially exacerbate the relationship, not repair it. ?It would seem to doom his original goal of ?using the voyage to patch up their relationship.

    And what wounded their relationship to begin with? ?All the overtime hours he put in solving cases when he was on the clock. ?In major metropolitan police forces, the work entails a lot unplanned overtime. ?A lot. ?(The overtime LAPD officers and detectives racked up — it’s gotta be the #1 reason so many of them had failed marriages and rotten relationships with their kids.)

    Anyway, ?I suggest that in the end redeeming himself in his son’s eyes would be an unintended consequence, a bonus. ?How so? Because, unlike when the detective is working the mean streets of the city, his son is close at hand, becomes an eyewitness to how his father works a case, comes to appreciate his father’s unsung heroism and dedication to seeing justice done.

    fwiw.

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  3. Posted: July 8, 2016In: Thriller

    When a bitten-to-death passenger is found dead in his cabin, a dad with son-issues aspires to catch the killer and redeem himself to his son.

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    Added an answer on July 8, 2016 at 8:43 am

    >>>a dad with son-issuesAwkward wording. ?And what does that mean? ?They're estranged, right?And how is that germane to the dramatic problem, solving the murder? ?That is, a character flaw should relate to dramatic problem in that the protagonist can't solve the latter until he overcomes thRead more

    >>>a dad with son-issues

    Awkward wording. ?And what does that mean? ?They’re estranged, right?

    And how is that germane to the dramatic problem, solving the murder? ?That is, a character flaw should relate to dramatic problem in that the protagonist can’t solve the latter until he overcomes the former.

    So does the version mean to suggest that he can’t solve the crime until he solves his “son-issues”? ?Or is the “son-issues” just an aggravating “B” story line.

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