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  1. Posted: June 26, 2016In: Comedy

    After being accidentally cryogenically frozen, four Brooklyn hipsters wake up 50 years later to find their neighborhood overtaken by corporations, and must fight to save the last standing bar from becoming a Starbucks.

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    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on June 27, 2016 at 2:52 am

    Okay.Is there any particular reason why it has to be 4 hipsters???Why not just one?And what if he owned the bar when he was accidentally frozen? [Hence, bigger stakes, greater emotional investment.]And what if when he's thawed after 50 years, he discovers it's being sold out to a BBC (big bad corporRead more

    Okay.

    Is there any particular reason why it has to be 4 hipsters???Why not just one?

    And what if he owned the bar when he was accidentally frozen? [Hence, bigger stakes, greater emotional investment.]

    And what if when he’s thawed after 50 years, he discovers it’s being sold out to a BBC (big bad corporation) by his granddaughter (as old now as he was then). ?She wants to cash out, take the money and run off to wherever.

    But he wants to keep he started the bar, ?and because it’s the an island of familiarity in what has become for him an alien world. ?[Again, bigger stakes for the character, more emotional investment in the outcome.]

    And what if he has 30 days to raise the money to match what the BBC is offering.?[A ticking clock to amplify the urgency.]?

    Whatever. ?Anyway, ?I suggest the story — and logline — would be stronger if : 1]) It were to focus one 1 hipster instead of an ensemble of 4; and ?2) he’s the original owner, struggling to hold on to his past in more ways than one; and 3) There’s a ticking clock.

    fwiw.

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  2. Posted: June 24, 2016In: Thriller

    When a malfunctioning nuke triggers a landslide and traps a plane crash survivor underground, he must lead panicky rocket scientists back to the nuke before it detonates.

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    Added an answer on June 27, 2016 at 12:31 am

    I appreciate Nir Shelter's effort to propose to a constructive alternative. ?But, alas, as I reside in the nation where most of the nuclear silos on the planet are embedded, I do not find any version of the concept to be credible.Nuclear silos were built to have a fighting chance of surviving directRead more

    I appreciate Nir Shelter’s effort to propose to a constructive alternative. ?But, alas, as I reside in the nation where most of the nuclear silos on the planet are embedded, I do not find any version of the concept to be credible.

    Nuclear silos were built to have a fighting chance of surviving direct nuclear attacks. ?That’s why they were dug so deep into ground — and hardened. ?Even if a ?Lockheed C-5 transport or a Boeing 747 were to crash on top of a site, it would be no more than a scratch, a bump in terms of the structural integrity and functionality of the site.

    Also the countdown, once commenced, would be too short — far shorter than the length of a feature film –for them to gain entrance and figure out how to stop it or disarm the missile.

    The Achilles heels of nuclear silos is the antiquated technology. ?By antiquated, I mean that too many of them still rely vacuum tubes, tape drives and 8″ and 5 1/4″ floppy disks ?– the “state of the art” technology that existed when the systems were first — or last — computerized.

    Now there’s a story waiting to be dramatized — a site that goes rogue because of obsolescent systems.

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: June 26, 2016In: Comedy

    After being accidentally cryogenically frozen, four Brooklyn hipsters wake up 50 years later to find their neighborhood overtaken by corporations, and must fight to save the last standing bar from becoming a Starbucks.

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    dpg Singularity
    Added an answer on June 27, 2016 at 12:09 am

    As Nir Shelter said.And the script has a legal complication: ?it will have to get clearance from Starbucks to use their trademark. ?What are the chances of ?Starbucks signing off on a story where they are the villain?Just saying.

    As Nir Shelter said.

    And the script has a legal complication: ?it will have to get clearance from Starbucks to use their trademark. ?What are the chances of ?Starbucks signing off on a story where they are the villain?

    Just saying.

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