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The hunter becomes the hunted when a woman lures her abusive husband into a death trap. (Short Script, 7pages)
Your right, the short story I did write has conflict in it, which would be the stakes.? I think I was thinking more alone the lines of 'Big' stakes, like found in action movie.? And yes a logline's soul purpose is to get someone to read/buy/make your script. "The logline has but a single purpose: toRead more
Your right, the short story I did write has conflict in it, which would be the stakes.? I think I was thinking more alone the lines of ‘Big’ stakes, like found in action movie.? And yes a logline’s soul purpose is to get someone to read/buy/make your script.
“The logline has but a single purpose: to convey the most essential elements of your story concisely, imaginatively, and smoothly. ” by John Robert Marlow? taken from his article on Building the perfect logline
WHO the story is about, what they want (their GOAL), and what stands in their way (the OBSTACLE)
So in mine, the WHO is the Abused wife,? the OBSTACLE is the Husband, thier GOAL is to escape for good.
Now maybe the wording of “death trap” is off, but If I say too much, it could ruin it.? On the other hand, if I don’t have enough, no one will read.
What I think I have works but I’m not sure.? And yes, every bit helps, Thank you.
See lessThe hunter becomes the hunted when a woman lures her abusive husband into a death trap. (Short Script, 7pages)
I think and believe that short stories have a whole different set of 'rule' for the logline. I could say everything that happens in the story but then there would be no point in reading the story.? Short stories tend not to follow the same format as a full length feature.? I'm not saying that my logRead more
I think and believe that short stories have a whole different set of ‘rule’ for the logline.
I could say everything that happens in the story but then there would be no point in reading the story.? Short stories tend not to follow the same format as a full length feature.? I’m not saying that my logline works best here but I’ve tried different version of the same story but always seem to run into the same kind of questions being asked.? It got me thinking, are these question being ask of the logline true of what would be in a short story?? I wrote another story a few weeks ago in which the question of the logline was, what’s at stake.? When I dove into the answer, it became clear to me, my short script didn’t have stakes.? It was too short for that, it was all about the set up and the twist.? Not time for stakes.? Many short stories don’t have stakes, or character arcs or even what does the character what?
Another version of the logline is this:
The hunter becomes the hunted when a terrified women sets in motion her escape plan before he kills her.
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The hunter becomes the hunted after he draws a gun on his wife, she lures her abusive husband into a death trap.
See lessThe trick is getting the hook and drawing the reader in without putting everything on the table.? I do appreciate this discussion as when you google logline writing for short scripts, there is virtually no information on it.?? Read loglines of short stories, then read the story.? It’s tough to write.
The hunter becomes the hunted when a woman lures her abusive husband into a death trap. (Short Script, 7pages)
Interesting, so you're saying I may be giving away too much at this point? What about something like: The hunter becomes the hunted when a terrified women sets in motion her escape plan before he kills her.
Interesting, so you’re saying I may be giving away too much at this point?
What about something like:
The hunter becomes the hunted when a terrified women sets in motion her escape plan before he kills her.
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