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A girl obsessed with UFO’s builds a small device to alert us, when the device goes off during a storm she encounters a strange figure.
I've added a link to the script, if that's not allowed, I understand.? I can't edit but perhaps the mods will remove the line if need be.The idea is that the girl believes in UFO?s, builds something and one shows up.? As I said, the short script itself is turning more into a feature type story.? WheRead more
I’ve added a link to the script, if that’s not allowed, I understand.? I can’t edit but perhaps the mods will remove the line if need be.
The idea is that the girl believes in UFO?s, builds something and one shows up.? As I said, the short script itself is turning more into a feature type story.? When the alien shows up, she falls and is hurt.? She ends up in the hospital.?? The doctors aren?t sure if she?s going to have any kind of brain damage.? The idea of including more of the ?possible? alien is something I?m fleshing out more as I go into a re write.? But I do want the alien to be part of it.
Now I?m not sure if I need to re write the logline to not lead on like she meets an alien and then surprise the reader that it?s possible?
Anyways, I really appreciate the help from everyone, if you have time a wish to read, here is a link to short script.
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Working title: MISSLE (or GOD OF DESTRUCTION) Logline: After helplessly witnessing his brother murdered by a vicious gang, a disabled man in LA sets out one night on his homemade killing machine to seek vengeance.
This concept reminds me a lot of The Purge: Anarchy.? I would be curious as to what make your concept different.? Don't get me wrong, I'm not say it can't work but it would be a question a producer would ask you. How is his brother viciously murdered?? Not really a hook for me, many action/thrillerRead more
This concept reminds me a lot of The Purge: Anarchy.? I would be curious as to what make your concept different.? Don’t get me wrong, I’m not say it can’t work but it would be a question a producer would ask you.
How is his brother viciously murdered?? Not really a hook for me, many action/thriller scripts have this.? At this point it’s just noise.
How disabled is he? ?How does a disabled man get around?? Again, don’t know the character so there is no real connection to care at this early stage.
WTF?is?this ?homemade killing machine?, and what does it look like?? This would be your hook right now, but it’s still a been there done that type deal.? However adding the disabled man into this home made machines is interesting and different.? I would really focus on that part.? That’s your answer to the question “what makes it different” in my opinion.
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Still can't seem to edit my post.? Not sure if anyone else is having this issue. If anyone is interested I can post the link to read the script.? I could really use help constructing this logline.
Still can’t seem to edit my post.? Not sure if anyone else is having this issue.
If anyone is interested I can post the link to read the script.? I could really use help constructing this logline.
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