1. Posted: May 20, 2017In:

    When a Goth Detective is tasked with solving a murder at a very optimistic circus, he must solve the case to be able to escape the happiness.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    But why Goth? Wouldn't it be better to identify with something else about tbis guy? Otherwise, this reads way better. Gj.

    But why Goth? Wouldn’t it be better to identify with something else about tbis guy?

    Otherwise, this reads way better. Gj.

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  2. Posted: May 20, 2017In:

    When a Goth Detective is tasked with solving a murder at a very optimistic circus, he must solve the case to be able to escape the happiness.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    If the MC begins as "goth" and your obj for him is to NOT change, then having him be successful wont allow him to ARC. That's not a good thing. What is really the reasonable ?objective for this detective while he's in the circus environment? I truly hope you have one for him.

    If the MC begins as “goth” and your obj for him is to NOT change, then having him be successful wont allow him to ARC. That’s not a good thing.

    What is really the reasonable ?objective for this detective while he’s in the circus environment? I truly hope you have one for him.

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  3. Posted: May 16, 2017In:

    After a space piracy witness and two cops are publicly murdered, the Senior Investigator must escape from the murderer and solve the piracy case before his family or more cops are killed

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    What is the setting for this adventure? Is it contained on a spacecraft somewhere? Cause then we can begin with murders occuring there and our investigator is contained with the murderer in that space -- makes things more dangerous that way.

    What is the setting for this adventure? Is it contained on a spacecraft somewhere? Cause then we can begin with murders occuring there and our investigator is contained with the murderer in that space — makes things more dangerous that way.

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