1. Posted: March 27, 2017In:

    -A retired Police officer hires two thieves to capture a cruel dacoit to take personal revenge

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Not that my ignorance of a word meaning is an excuse, but loglines are meant to super-communicate the story idea in a brief swipe of the pen. I wouldn't use words that would hinder that cause with probably a large population of viewers -- more than 50%, I would think.

    Not that my ignorance of a word meaning is an excuse, but loglines are meant to super-communicate the story idea in a brief swipe of the pen. I wouldn’t use words that would hinder that cause with probably a large population of viewers — more than 50%, I would think.

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  2. Posted: March 27, 2017In:

    -A retired Police officer hires two thieves to capture a cruel dacoit to take personal revenge

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    A few things jump out at me. Why would a cop hire someone to do what he is readily capable of? WTF is a dacoit? Thieves steal. If the cop is the protagonist then don't remove his story drive and have him give it away to someone else, unless there is a damn good reason for it, like he's physically inRead more

    A few things jump out at me.

    Why would a cop hire someone to do what he is readily capable of?

    WTF is a dacoit?

    Thieves steal. If the cop is the protagonist then don’t remove his story drive and have him give it away to someone else, unless there is a damn good reason for it, like he’s physically incapable of doing it himself.

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  3. Posted: March 26, 2017In:

    When a businessman is injured in a car accident, he embarks on a quest to find the origin of a family heirloom in dangerous Brazilian jungle.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    What does getting injured in a car accident have to do with embarking on a quest? He should find a hospital.

    What does getting injured in a car accident have to do with embarking on a quest? He should find a hospital.

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