1. Posted: March 26, 2017In:

    An ex-con sacrifices everything for true love after trying to go straight.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    It's amazing how great and exciting we think a logline sounds until it goes under the scalpel -- and it doesn't even have to be a sharp one at that. One thing is for sure, I will never use "sacrifices everything" ever again. lol.

    It’s amazing how great and exciting we think a logline sounds until it goes under the scalpel — and it doesn’t even have to be a sharp one at that.

    One thing is for sure, I will never use “sacrifices everything” ever again. lol.

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  2. Posted: March 26, 2017In:

    An LA cab driver struggles to survive as he is forced to chauffeur a ruthless hit man to complete a series of jobs.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    An L.A. cab driver is forced? to transport a hit man for a night of killing while figuring out a way to stop him.

    An L.A. cab driver is forced? to transport a hit man for a night of killing while figuring out a way to stop him.

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  3. Posted: March 25, 2017In:

    To forgive the woman who triggered his father?s suicide, a man must risk everything to return his lucky pendant to its origin in the Brazilian jungle

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    Gone are the days of saying "must risk everything" and having that be good enough. As the regulars on here will tell you, we need to know more. Right off the bat, it looks like Act iib occurs too late in the story, and should probably be the Incit Inc and the girl is the Antagonist that you need toRead more

    Gone are the days of saying “must risk everything” and having that be good enough. As the regulars on here will tell you, we need to know more. Right off the bat, it looks like Act iib occurs too late in the story, and should probably be the Incit Inc and the girl is the Antagonist that you need to mention in the log. Hmmm, but how?

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