1. Posted: February 5, 2018In:

    two elderly ladies rooming together at a nursing home becomes best friends regardless of their odd personalities.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    As above, they said it well without having more info on the struggle.

    As above, they said it well without having more info on the struggle.

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  2. Posted: February 3, 2018In:

    When the end of an abusive relationship sends an isolated college student reeling, she struggles to regain confidence by participating in a legendary campus tradition: stealing the hands from the campus clocktower.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    I just don't see a way to un-encapsulate this story and make it feature material, let alone have enough material for a 3 act structure.

    I just don’t see a way to un-encapsulate this story and make it feature material, let alone have enough material for a 3 act structure.

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  3. Posted: February 3, 2018In:

    When the end of an abusive relationship sends an isolated college student reeling, she struggles to regain confidence by participating in a legendary campus tradition: stealing the hands from the campus clocktower.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    I doubt the clocktower will fight back when she steals the hands, so what other antagonistic force is involved in your story? If there is a group that she's trying to become part of -- you should mention that instead. Otherwise, I don't see much of a story here.

    I doubt the clocktower will fight back when she steals the hands, so what other antagonistic force is involved in your story?

    If there is a group that she’s trying to become part of — you should mention that instead.

    Otherwise, I don’t see much of a story here.

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