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When an arcane creature disembowels several Asian women in 1900s San Francisco, a war-weary army officer teams with a disparate group of social outcasts to hunt it down? Only to discover the city council is the real force behind the monster?s bloodbath.
IMO everything after the ellipsis can be cut. I'd rather watch the movie to find out who is responsible rather than be told. Why mention the disemboweling? Is is important in the logline? Nir gives some good advice about the inciting incident. Is there one for your M.C.? There needs to be one. OtherRead more
IMO everything after the ellipsis can be cut. I’d rather watch the movie to find out who is responsible rather than be told.
Why mention the disemboweling? Is is important in the logline?
Nir gives some good advice about the inciting incident. Is there one for your M.C.? There needs to be one.
Otherwise, interesting topic. Is it based on any urban legends?
See lessRealizing his company is in danger of losing unpopularity, due to competition with his arch nemesis. A young successful fashion marketer contracts a plan to steal one of his high ranked female supermodels in order to boost his sales, only to grow unexpected feelings that could lead him into losing his business as a whole.
5 words can replace your first 9 for economy: To save his failing company, a young fashion marketer exploits a supermodel that he ultimately falls in love with and must decide between the future of his company and their happiness together. Somewhat shorter.
5 words can replace your first 9 for economy:
To save his failing company, a young fashion marketer exploits a supermodel that he ultimately falls in love with and must decide between the future of his company and their happiness together.
Somewhat shorter.
See lessSet in a mythical time in precolonial America, when a race of demons begin killing humans in their sleep and replacing them with duplicates, a naive hunter must work with his tribal enemies to stop the monsters before they are taken next.
This seems to give away too much (intent of the demons to kill and replace) while not revealing what the Hunter must face in order to be victorious.
This seems to give away too much (intent of the demons to kill and replace) while not revealing what the Hunter must face in order to be victorious.
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