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A young girl, obsessed with designing a robot that will replace her dead mother, learns that she has been chosen to compete at an International Robotics Meet, in the first all girls team. But when her grandmother is diagnosed with Alzheimers she must choose between the obligations of her traditional Sri Lankan family and her own dreams.
This concept is great, though your logline is much too long. Here's an example of how you could shorten it: 'Accepted into a competition testing her engineering prowess, a young girl must decide whether or not to abandon her team and put aside her obsession of creating a replacement mother for herseRead more
This concept is great, though your logline is much too long. Here’s an example of how you could shorten it: ‘Accepted into a competition testing her engineering prowess, a young girl must decide whether or not to abandon her team and put aside her obsession of creating a replacement mother for herself, after her grandmother falls ill.’
See lessA hardcore gamer learns from mysterious rebels about the true nature of his horrific childhood and undergoes an initiation ritual to confront the little black monster that tormented him as a child … again.
Your description of the lead character seems misplaced and irrelevant, unless you specify that he meets the 'mysterious rebels' while playing one of his games online. Everything else is too confusing as to why it is all happening. What is this 'initiation ritual' exactly? Also, I want to know what tRead more
Your description of the lead character seems misplaced and irrelevant, unless you specify that he meets the ‘mysterious rebels’ while playing one of his games online. Everything else is too confusing as to why it is all happening. What is this ‘initiation ritual’ exactly? Also, I want to know what the ‘true nature of his horrific childhood’ is to get a better understanding of ‘the little black monser’. I would lose the ‘…again’ at the end.
See lessWhen two losers, tempted by the promise of money, get mixed up in the love triangle of two witches, they will need all their wits to get out of the mess.
Very cool premise, though it currently reads more like a comedy than action movie, and the final part of your logline: 'they will need all their wits to get out of the mess' seems a too convenient and vague description of how the conflict is resolved. Try changing it to something more specific to thRead more
Very cool premise, though it currently reads more like a comedy than action movie, and the final part of your logline: ‘they will need all their wits to get out of the mess’ seems a too convenient and vague description of how the conflict is resolved. Try changing it to something more specific to the story.
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