I prefer this version as it attempts to answer why he attends the self-help groups. Although you could have posted the second version as a comment here 😉.

Thinking out loud…
“In a male-dominated town” can be replaced with e.g., ”Set in an 80’s good old boy town, …”.
“a frustrated editor” suggestion “a closeted editor”.
“secretly attends self-help groups for men” coming from a small town myself, a single town folk will make it their business to know everyone else’s. In saying this, I’m not sure how secretive your protag actions can be especially in a group setting.
“to prepare himself against them” is a poignant statement – very powerful!
“after the death of a gay dancer” without your synopsis, this will appear to come from left field to the reader – suggest a logline rearrangement.

Example: Wordy, hope you get the idea.
“Set in an 80’s good old boy town with no justice for the recent death of a gay dancer, a closeted editor attends men’s self-help groups to prepare for the intolerance of his coming out declaration”

Hope you find this constructive; this is a solid premise.
Take care.

This appears to be two separate events:
1. “When children discover a catastrophic battlefield in every human brain”
2. “Buddha teams up with each prophet”

Who are these children – prophets? If so, I would state to link these two events.

Example:
“When the child prophets of Buddha discover a catastrophic battlefield in every human brain, Buddha teams up to liberate God from an age-old hypocritical mindset to engender recession and a stress-free psychic existence”

Suggestion: “every human brain” sounds like a vast wasteland and hard to envision what this would look like on screen, maybe you can start by changing one influential person to bring this premise closer to home?

Also, I didn’t mention “devil imprisoned God for ages” to keep the reader from saying “why now” after all these ages? I wanted the impression of these children’s discovery as a “now” concept.

Take care.