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Interwined stories between families changed forever by a man’s sexual abuse of a neighbor’s daughter.
Tragic, I see one fam wanting vengeance, another with their head in the sand, another wanting to flee. "Three families in a close-knit neighborhood intertwine in three tales of fallout and atonement when a daughter is sexually abused."
Tragic, I see one fam wanting vengeance, another with their head in the sand, another wanting to flee.
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Three characters, three life stories, integrate as a schizophrenic detective puts together puzzle-pieces in a quest to imprison a split-serial killer posing as Hollywood’s Messiah. — WHOLE
A better version, thinking out loud – what about: 1. Switching "Tales" with "Alter egos ..." 2. Playing on alter egos, instead of “discover” what about uncover? To uncover is to reveal. 3. Switching “imprison” with lock-up – this word is more associated with emotions e.g., the negative emotion thatRead more
A better version, thinking out loud – what about:
1. Switching “Tales” with “Alter egos …”
2. Playing on alter egos, instead of “discover” what about uncover? To uncover is to reveal.
3. Switching “imprison” with lock-up – this word is more associated with emotions e.g., the negative emotion that created the “killer” alter ego.
“Alter egos intertwine as a schizophrenic detective puts together puzzle-pieces in a quest to uncover and lock up a serial killer posing as Hollywood’s Messiah”.
BTW: You owe Richiev and me a beer 😉
See lessThree characters, three life stories, integrate as a schizophrenic detective puts together puzzle-pieces in a quest to imprison a split-serial killer posing as Hollywood’s Messiah. — WHOLE
You did not fail, this is intriguing stuff, and – I did get a Fight Club (same guy vibe) from your logline. Since you mentioned the audience sees the same guy living three separate lives think about this angle as well. “The schizophrenic lives of an LAPD detective, a serial killer posing as HollywooRead more
You did not fail, this is intriguing stuff, and – I did get a Fight Club (same guy vibe) from your logline. Since you mentioned the audience sees the same guy living three separate lives think about this angle as well.
“The schizophrenic lives of an LAPD detective, a serial killer posing as Hollywood’s Messiah, and a [third guy e.g., referee] intertwine in three tales of [word that links all three at their worst] and [word that links all three at their conclusion].
In this version, the detective/serial killer relationship is implied. Notice the impromptu profession I gave the third 😊 – you get the idea. Keep going.
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