1. Posted: January 3, 2013In:

    When Earth is threatened by a cosmic war, a young woman with newly-awakened powers becomes mankind's only defense.

    jde Penpusher

    First, thank you for the critique! I want to keep her powers a bit of a mystery that finally become fully realized at the Third Act Plot Reversal. How's this: When Earth is threatened by a cosmic war, an independent, young woman with newly-awakened powers is mankind's only defense against the returnRead more

    First, thank you for the critique!

    I want to keep her powers a bit of a mystery that finally become fully realized at the Third Act Plot Reversal.

    How’s this:
    When Earth is threatened by a cosmic war, an independent, young woman with newly-awakened powers is mankind’s only defense against the return of ancient gods.

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  2. Posted: January 3, 2013In:

    With dreams of writing the next great American novel, a struggling author blackmails a middle-aged hitman for inspiration.

    jde Penpusher

    I like this. It gives just enough of the story to make me want to read the screenplay. I am interested to know what the struggling author uses to blackmail the hitman.

    I like this. It gives just enough of the story to make me want to read the screenplay. I am interested to know what the struggling author uses to blackmail the hitman.

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