1. Posted: February 13, 2013In:

    After her man is taken hostage in a botched drugs heist his needy gangland girlfriend must unravel the truth behind what went down if either of them are to make it out alive.

    katiefracas

    Thanks - he's not the main character, this is all her P.O.V. I'll have another attempt...I really appreciate the feedback!

    Thanks – he’s not the main character, this is all her P.O.V.
    I’ll have another attempt…I really appreciate the feedback!

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  2. Posted: February 13, 2013In:

    A scientist and her group find a new element on archaeological excavations at an earth like planet making the group obsessed and killing each other but she pulls against her hallucinations and her group in order to get the element aboard the scientific base.

    katiefracas

    I like this idea a lot but I would love to see it streamlined. It seems like the core components are an element that inspires hallucinations which lead people to kill and the protagonist's goal of getting the element on board the ship. (and presumably living!) That's already a lot to pack into a logRead more

    I like this idea a lot but I would love to see it streamlined.

    It seems like the core components are an element that inspires hallucinations which lead people to kill and the protagonist’s goal of getting the element on board the ship. (and presumably living!) That’s already a lot to pack into a logline – I’d strip everything else out.

    Good luck!

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  3. Posted: February 8, 2013In:

    Leonard and Sheldon avert a nuclear disaster, as Amy tries to cure Raj of his social anxiety around women, while Bernadette throws Howard a birthday to remember.

    katiefracas

    Sounds like this could be a really interesting and truly original screenplay! As with Jan above me I think I agree that my concern is I don't get from your logline the sense of what your movie will actually be about - its as though you've given a snapshot of characters and scenarios within your filmRead more

    Sounds like this could be a really interesting and truly original screenplay!

    As with Jan above me I think I agree that my concern is I don’t get from your logline the sense of what your movie will actually be about – its as though you’ve given a snapshot of characters and scenarios within your film rather than an idea of what the narrative content of your film would be, or the overarching theme.

    That must be challenging with these multi story strand style screenplays – which can be so brilliant!

    If there is an event that draws the characters together or forces them to go on some sort of journey you could focus in there…

    “When an oddball group of party guests realise nuclear disaster could be imminent they must try to overcome their personal quirks to work together and avert disaster”

    Apologies if that’s not at all your film. Perhaps the main goal is simply to make sure Howard is oblivious to the going on around him and has a great birthday…

    What ever the main goal of your group or protagonist that’s what I want to hear about!

    (Your premise makes me think of death at a funeral – I hope that tone is what you have in mind, I love it!)

    Best of luck

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