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  1. Posted: March 26, 2017In: Action

    An Obeah Woman leads a bioweapons collector into the Ta?no ?Land of Souls? to find the cure for a deadly virus he helped create

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    wow i am shocked Obeah woman isnt well known after Pirates of the Caribbean, ?Obeah are sort of like shamans ?but much older and some of it is similar to voodoo but it is still distinct, I cant't even say a female shaman because the word for that is even more obscure, ?it is mudang. This is the probRead more

    wow i am shocked Obeah woman isnt well known after Pirates of the Caribbean, ?Obeah are sort of like shamans ?but much older and some of it is similar to voodoo but it is still distinct, I cant’t even say a female shaman because the word for that is even more obscure, ?it is mudang. This is the problem of writing a historical novel, it is impossible to explain the terms and concepts in a 25 word hook, Taino were the Indians that met Columbus and were enslaved, ?Most died from diseases and starvation and that is why the Spanish and French began to import black slaves from Africa, to replace the ?Caribbean island natives they had slaughtered. ?My Obeah Woman is also a nun and a pediatrician but try that in a hook and see the response. You know about the Tainos ‘Land of Souls” even though you may not recognize it as that. I’m sure you remember the creation myth about a Great Sea Turtle carrying the world on its back, The sun and stars seem to go underground and the Taino ‘Heaven’ or ‘Land of Souls’ is just like the Mayans, it is underground. The sacred places were entered through caves and Cenotes. Taino are NOT Mayan nor are they Aztec but they share syncretic myths that seem similar like the tales of a world wide flood in many cultures. We already determined that the bioweapons collector is a poor protagonist ?but the Obeah Woman is virtuous and kind. That may be a poor hook but it is precise. ?If you think this bad wait until I actually use Hispanic myths, the culture is full of odd names that represent terrifying beings and places. ?So, here is the best I can do even though it isnt exact:

    A Medicine Woman leads a Bioweapons Collector into the sacred caverns of the “Land of the Souls”to find a cure for the ?virus he created.

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  2. Posted: March 18, 2017In: Action

    A cash strapped hit-woman, must confront the demons of her past, while juggling the bone crunching world of professional hits and the guardianship of her deceased sisters kids.

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    Added an answer on March 26, 2017 at 4:08 am

    Hmm this sounds vaguely like Die Hard with a Diaper or Misadventures in Babysitting . I did lear something on Stack Exchange though about cliches: Writers often indulge a charming fantasy that publisher and agents are looking for originality. They are not. They are looking for works that fit into aRead more

    Hmm this sounds vaguely like Die Hard with a Diaper or Misadventures in Babysitting . I did lear something on Stack Exchange though about cliches:

    Writers often indulge a charming fantasy that publisher and agents are looking for originality. They are not. They are looking for works that fit into a well established sales channel and that habitual readers of a genre can quickly identify as the kind of book they like to read. Pretty much the worst thing you can do in a query letter is indulge in any kind or originality. This is about sales, and sales is all about established and reliable taste.

    clich? s are not as bad as they may seem. I used ‘cat and mouse’ and was excoriated for its use but this reviewer I trust pointed out the obvious:
    “Cat and mouse game” is an idiom that seems to show up pretty frequently in the description of published thrillers. So that’s a good sign that it works to sell books. Avid readers, the kind that keep publishers and agents in peanut butter and jelly sandwiches, are always looking for another fix of the same drug. They want the same, only different. But not so different that it is no longer the same. Sameness is not a vice, it is a virtue.

    So according to him don’t worry too much about using a recognizable idiom as long as it has a proven track record of selling books

    http://writers.stackexchange.com/questions/27336/are-idioms-in-query-letters-a-bad-idea/27339?noredirect=1#comment40323_27339

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  3. Posted: March 25, 2017In: Action

    action,comedy about incurious uber driver forced to save the life of his next pick up who is young argumentative woman being chased by a group of terrorists.

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    Fee or flee? ?An Uber driver's ride argues over his rates as?terrorists chase them through one misadventure after another.

    Fee or flee? ?An Uber driver’s ride argues over his rates as?terrorists chase them through one misadventure after another.

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