1. Posted: February 6, 2018In:

    Sick of being ridiculed at, A down on the luck super hero sets 24 hours to solve any case .

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    So he sets an open challenge? Also it reads like she/he should be a down on his detective. I would say: A cocksure Superhero sets an open challenge to the world that he can beat any villain, but when the most dangerous super-villain breaks free of prison to accept the challenge he will need to overcRead more

    So he sets an open challenge? Also it reads like she/he should be a down on his detective.

    I would say: A cocksure Superhero sets an open challenge to the world that he can beat any villain, but when the most dangerous super-villain breaks free of prison to accept the challenge he will need to overcome his arrogance to defeat the villain and prove himself a hero.

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  2. Posted: February 6, 2018In:

    Fueled by their own ghostly experiences, a passionate believer and her lifelong best friend do battle for those plagued with the paranormal with nowhere else to turn.

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    A kinda Paranormal A-Team? That would be cool, and be different enough from Ghosted and Ghost Busters. Especially if ghosts weren?t hidden, but in this world normal ?living? side-by-side but some go too far. However in logline terms, you have given a motivation- Awesome- but what starts the story, wRead more

    A kinda Paranormal A-Team? That would be cool, and be different enough from Ghosted and Ghost Busters. Especially if ghosts weren?t hidden, but in this world normal ?living? side-by-side but some go too far.
    However in logline terms, you have given a motivation- Awesome- but what starts the story, what triggers that battle?

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  3. Posted: February 6, 2018In:

    When a sarcastic lesbian becomes best friends with the God of War, she gets dragged into a centuries long battle for the fate of mankind.

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    I would have her fall in love with The God of War - I don?t see why a modern take couldn?t be female. This way she would choose as opposed to be dragged into this war for mankind. The only thing I am not sure of is: Are they living in a mythical land E.G. Clash of the Titans or is this in a normal wRead more

    I would have her fall in love with The God of War – I don?t see why a modern take couldn?t be female. This way she would choose as opposed to be dragged into this war for mankind.
    The only thing I am not sure of is: Are they living in a mythical land E.G. Clash of the Titans or is this in a normal world where the Gods exist we just don?t know it?

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