1. Posted: October 17, 2018In:

    A rework of an older logline

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    Yes, I agree with the revised version suggested above. Amidst the French Revolution and the Reign of Terror, the feminist Mary Wollstonecraft broke all the rules of society and religion to fight for women?s rights and for love. I actually thought that acceptance would have been a bigger problem thanRead more

    Yes, I agree with the revised version suggested above.

    Amidst the French Revolution and the Reign of Terror, the feminist Mary Wollstonecraft broke all the rules of society and religion to fight for women?s rights and for love.

    I actually thought that acceptance would have been a bigger problem than love as not many men could have handled her (assuming it was a man she was after). the only thing I ask is why? What caused her to change? step up? Who was she – a teacher? a scholar? A???? Just gives it more life to someone who does know who she is.

    I’ve never heard of this woman but definitely would like to know more!!

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  2. Posted: March 7, 2019In:

    To fulfil her destiny, a young queen, who hates war, must unite her southland clans and lead them into one last, decisive battle against the invading barbarians from the north.

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    So what time are we in? 1600's ? Earlier? To give a sense of time and space.   So would not the inciting inciting incident be the death of her father. After the death of her father, a young (genteel? naive? inexperienced? clever? ambitious? ) queen must unite the warring clans of her kingdom toRead more

    So what time are we in? 1600’s ? Earlier? To give a sense of time and space.

     

    So would not the inciting inciting incident be the death of her father.

    After the death of her father, a young (genteel? naive? inexperienced? clever? ambitious? ) queen must unite the warring clans of her kingdom to survive against the invading barbarians from the north?

    I understand there are prequels and there is, I’m thinking, a kind of Game of Thrones epic drama? Maybe you can add in something to the title which adds interest to relationship

    After the death of her father, a young (genteel? naive? inexperienced? clever? ambitious? Warrior? ) queen and her sisters, must defeat? the Bada Girl monks to unite the warring clans of her kingdom against the invading barbarians from the north?

     

    That gets your key characters in but with purpose?

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  3. Posted: March 18, 2019In:

    A young girl, orphaned by cholera struggles, to stay out of the hands of the man who abused her. She dons boy?s clothes to flee West in search of a new family.

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    Yes- historical time and place but help greatly and may explain why she dons boys clothes? - to be a sailor? a soldier? apprenticeship? How young is the girl? How does being female become an obstacle? Who is the abuser - family? priest? cop? Why would he look for her? To sell her? To keep her?

    Yes- historical time and place but help greatly and may explain why she dons boys clothes? – to be a sailor? a soldier? apprenticeship?

    How young is the girl? How does being female become an obstacle?

    Who is the abuser – family? priest? cop? Why would he look for her? To sell her? To keep her?

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