1. Posted: April 16, 2015In:

    A homicide detective goes on the run to prove his innocence after he?s framed for murder by a malevolent police cyber-intelligence.

    Leebo159

    Thanks Nir. Everyone's input has been fantastic.

    Thanks Nir. Everyone’s input has been fantastic.

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  2. Posted: April 21, 2015In:

    When a distrusting telepath learns his whole life has been a lie, he must take on the shadowy agency he works for to uncover his real past.

    Leebo159

    This concept seems similar to a movie called "Push." You may want to put a unique/different spin on the concept to separate your story from Push and others like it. Maybe tell us more about what job the protag is doing for the shadowy agency or how the protag came to work for them. Was the protag abRead more

    This concept seems similar to a movie called “Push.”

    You may want to put a unique/different spin on the concept to separate your story from Push and others like it. Maybe tell us more about what job the protag is doing for the shadowy agency or how the protag came to work for them. Was the protag abducted from his family, etc.

    When a despondent telepath discovers his whole life has been a lie, he takes on the shadowy agency who abducted him to uncover his past and make them pay. Something like that. It still needs higher stakes though.

    Hope this helps.

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  3. Posted: April 16, 2015In:

    A homicide detective goes on the run to prove his innocence after he?s framed for murder by a malevolent police cyber-intelligence.

    Leebo159

    Thanks Nir. I see where you're coming from. It seems I have to restructure the logline to set up the world of the story. Maybe something like this: In a future where past homicides can be viewed in real-time, a detective fights to prove his innocence when he?s framed for murder by a killer he once cRead more

    Thanks Nir. I see where you’re coming from. It seems I have to restructure the logline to set up the world of the story. Maybe something like this:

    In a future where past homicides can be viewed in real-time, a detective fights to prove his innocence when he?s framed for murder by a killer he once captured and saw executed.

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