1. Posted: November 22, 2019In:

    Trapped in a mansion filled with vampires and their human cattle, an amnesia-ridden detective must figure out how he got there, how to get out – and who to trust.

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    I like the set-up, but I wondered what part the detective's amnesia plays in this? Also, if he's trapped in a mansion filled with vampires, surely his most pressing need is to escape (not figure out how he got there).

    I like the set-up, but I wondered what part the detective’s amnesia plays in this? Also, if he’s trapped in a mansion filled with vampires, surely his most pressing need is to escape (not figure out how he got there).

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  2. Posted: November 22, 2019In:

    Chained together by backwoods cannibals, a bank robber and his hostage escape and must survive in unknown terrain – while the hostage is desperate to save her daughter, who they left with their captors.

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    I agree with Richiev - I think you need to choose a protagonist for us to follow - and the hostage seems like the likely choice. He/she then has has to escape the cannibals to rescue his/her daughter.

    I agree with Richiev – I think you need to choose a protagonist for us to follow – and the hostage seems like the likely choice. He/she then has has to escape the cannibals to rescue his/her daughter.

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  3. Posted: November 22, 2019In:

    During an unruly blizzard, a family is trapped in their house with a malevolent ghost who has their daughter, and given the choice – get out and live or look for their daughter and die.

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    I'm not sure if the blizzard is a red herring here. And why would they choose to look for their daughter if they're going to die, as what would then happen to the daughter? Could you set up a different dilemma that pits them against the ghost?

    I’m not sure if the blizzard is a red herring here. And why would they choose to look for their daughter if they’re going to die, as what would then happen to the daughter? Could you set up a different dilemma that pits them against the ghost?

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