1. Posted: February 18, 2018In:

    After a scientific accident that leaves everyone dead and one with fire abilities, the survivor must travel to a sacred temple to learn how to control his abilities.

    Leviathan Samurai

    Let me try again. I think I know just where to go with that one. After a scientific accident everyone dead and one with fire abilities, the survivor must seek out a sacred temple to learn how to control his abilities before someone else with his same abilities leads him down a dark path for his ownRead more

    Let me try again. I think I know just where to go with that one.

    After a scientific accident everyone dead and one with fire abilities, the survivor must seek out a sacred temple to learn how to control his abilities before someone else with his same abilities leads him down a dark path for his own gains.

    I think that covers everything, but it may be a little long. I don’t know if there’s a way to break down, but I’ll keep looking.

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  2. Posted: February 11, 2018In:

    After losing everything in a battle that he thought was to the death, The Gambler Fox is teleported from Mystic Post Medieval Ireland to Modern Day Las Vegas, Fox must learn to survive and live with a different type of people while looking for the one, Raven, who took everything from him and try to keep his reborn love, Vivian, from being killed a second time.

    Leviathan Samurai

    Let's try this one, hopefully a little more detailed, yet simple. When a gambler from Mystic Post Medieval Ireland wakes up from a time jump, he must learn to live in modern day Las Vegas to stop a witch before she destroys his world. I'm missing something, but I know it's getting better.

    Let’s try this one, hopefully a little more detailed, yet simple.

    When a gambler from Mystic Post Medieval Ireland wakes up from a time jump, he must learn to live in modern day Las Vegas to stop a witch before she destroys his world.

    I’m missing something, but I know it’s getting better.

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  3. Posted: February 10, 2018In:

    When a reclusive, secretly psychic troubleshooter is threatened to do a job, or loose it, she and her ghostly toy T.Rex sidekick head to Berlin. When she “sees” the rail road company’s problem involves thiefs and Nazi’s, fixing this problem becomes a mission. I am sooo not done with this logline yet ( it is too long) but would love to hear your opinion on it. Greetings Mack I have put it in the superhero section because she has secret “powers”and fights evil (Nazi’s) with it.

    Leviathan Samurai

    As I'm learning as well, try to keep your plot down to two lines: The incident and response. Just like with the formula. It has way too many possibilities which makes people get lost in translation or just confused. After reading the second one, I think it's still too long, but you are definitely maRead more

    As I’m learning as well, try to keep your plot down to two lines: The incident and response. Just like with the formula. It has way too many possibilities which makes people get lost in translation or just confused.

    After reading the second one, I think it’s still too long, but you are definitely making incredible progress. Keep at it.

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