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A rural grandfather with a distant relationship with his urbanite daughter will try to convince her that his granddaughter study the next year in the village school and so the school will not close
I quite like this story for its unambitious nature, though I must admit this is a hard sell given that the stakes aren't very high since not many readers are going to be anxious whether or not a rural school stays open. Nevertheless, I've tried to simplify your logline all whilst adding my own takeRead more
I quite like this story for its unambitious nature, though I must admit this is a hard sell given that the stakes aren’t very high since not many readers are going to be anxious whether or not a rural school stays open. Nevertheless, I’ve tried to simplify your logline all whilst adding my own take on the characters.
“A distant grandfather must get his ill-parented granddaughter to attend the village school to prevent its closure at the reluctance of her workaholic mother.”
I removed “rural” and “urbanite” from the character descriptions since I feel the word “distant,” in conjunction with “the village school,” convey the physical distance between the characters. The secondary function of the word “distant” serves as implication that the relationship between the grandfather and his daughter and helps add to the tension between these two characters.
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Thank you for your response Odie
Thank you for your response Odie
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I'm afraid this is very vague, I can't see the intended direction this anthology is meant to be going. I'll forgive you in the sense that anything anthological is going to be hard to pitch in the first place, but be mindful that people don't give loglines the benefit of the doubt. Either they sparkRead more
I’m afraid this is very vague, I can’t see the intended direction this anthology is meant to be going. I’ll forgive you in the sense that anything anthological is going to be hard to pitch in the first place, but be mindful that people don’t give loglines the benefit of the doubt. Either they spark a clear idea into the reader’s head, or they don’t. Since this pitch comes off as unfinished, the reader is going to assume the same of your written work and see your logline as being representative of an unfocused anthology.
As for some specifics I at least some idea of a compelling character, whether that be a broad description of the character’s themselves or perhaps even the character of the city that they all share. Now that I’ve said that, I think your best bet would be to put a spin on the Big Apple and make it unique to your story. However given the added trouble of trying to fit in character goals, an inciting incident and stakes, I think you would be better off making individual loglines for each short story. This is especially true if there is little overlapping between the eleven short stories.
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