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After his wife and childhood dies unexpectedly from an illness, a Marine gains the ability to time travel so that he can remember all the times he spent with her.
This is not so much for this specific logline but rather your overall logline writing skills, and so here are some important resources to further your understanding of a logline: Fast Screenplay ? The Producer?s Perspective Part 1 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r01B6mPXMjU&ab_channel=FASRead more
This is not so much for this specific logline but rather your overall logline writing skills, and so here are some important resources to further your understanding of a logline:
Watch these videos in order and watch them again and again until you?ve memorised what loglines are all about. Being vague on what makes a logline puts you at a huge disadvantage up against people who understand what makes a logline.
See lessAfter the climate change destroyed the balance between the real and fantastic world in Kamakura, a young woman whit magical Powers decides to contact two documentary filmakers to help her investigaste the supernatural events that happen in the city.
Protagonist: "A young woman with magical powers". How about a magically gifted [woman]? (A magically gifted [adjective/occupation]?)Goal: To get documentary filmmakers to investigate supernatural events in a Japanese city??? This isn't really a compelling goal because there is nothing really relatabRead more
Protagonist: “A young woman with magical powers”. How about a magically gifted [woman]? (A magically gifted [adjective/occupation]?)
Goal: To get documentary filmmakers to investigate supernatural events in a Japanese city??? This isn’t really a compelling goal because there is nothing really relatable about it. Is this a Japanese found footage flick? I don’t really understand what is going on here.
Antagonist: There is no antagonist, but the supernatural events could suggest an antagonistic man versus nature theme if this story is going for a supernatural/godlike take on nature.
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Questions to consider:
Who is this magically gifted woman?
Why does she feel the need to get documentary filmmakers to investigate supernatural events in Kamakura?
What has climate change go to do with supernatural events occurring in a Japanese city?
How does climate change destroy the balance between the real world and the fantastic world?
What is this fantastic world and exactly what are these supernatural events?
See lessAfter his wife and childhood dies unexpectedly from an illness, a Marine gains the ability to time travel so that he can remember all the times he spent with her.
Your logline: "Two childhood friends become lovers until one of the dies unexpectedly."Currently your logline only states an event...Event: Protagonist's lover dies. Dies of what, murder, illness, accident, suicide? Dies when, at the inciting incident, midpoint reversal? We need to know the specificRead more
Your logline: “Two childhood friends become lovers until one of the dies unexpectedly.”
Currently your logline only states an event…
Event: Protagonist’s lover dies. Dies of what, murder, illness, accident, suicide? Dies when, at the inciting incident, midpoint reversal? We need to know the specifics of this and most importantly HOW it changes the protagonist’s life.
As it stands this a merely stated event happens which makes your logline read like a thing of the past, well before it has even started.
Please refer back to the logline formula and when writing your next logline start with this list:
(I’ll exclude the stakes in this list because they can be hard brainstorm for, rather they seem to come naturally when you understand the first three elements of your story.)
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