1. Posted: August 16, 2013In:

    A dysfunctional dad and his rebellious daughter are forced to join each other in a bike race where they battle the establishment and each other relentlessly.

    Louise Weihart Penpusher

    This has a nice ring to it. I guess there are two protagonists? What is the actual goal though? And what is the flaw that needs to be overcome or the lesson/s they have to learn to get the goal?

    This has a nice ring to it. I guess there are two protagonists? What is the actual goal though? And what is the flaw that needs to be overcome or the lesson/s they have to learn to get the goal?

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  2. Posted: August 15, 2013In:

    Hoping to win her affection, an emotionally stunted middle-manager plans a 21st birthday party for the sister of his recently deceased best friend.

    Louise Weihart Penpusher

    I agree that 'emotionally stunted' and 'middle manager' are a bit open-ended. What is actually wrong with him emotionally (what is his flaw?) What is his actual job? And why does he have to do this for the girl now?

    I agree that ’emotionally stunted’ and ‘middle manager’ are a bit open-ended. What is actually wrong with him emotionally (what is his flaw?) What is his actual job? And why does he have to do this for the girl now?

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  3. Posted: August 16, 2013In:

    When a lonely, middle-aged Aussie long-distance truckie finds love online with a city girl, he must overcome his fear of losing what he loves most to win her heart.

    Louise Weihart Penpusher

    Thanks!!! Think it might need to be Aussie but love interest could be US immigrant. Definitely need to find the overriding flaw though ....

    Thanks!!! Think it might need to be Aussie but love interest could be US immigrant. Definitely need to find the overriding flaw though ….

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