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In the world of Remnant, the Faunus face oppression, deportation and subjugation at the hands of humanity. After a young Sienna Khan’s ambitious miners revolt ended in calamity she was pulled from the ruins by Kali of the resistance and her childhood friend, Ghira. With humanities war against the Faunus entering a new stage with Dr Merlot’s terrible machines of war, these young heroes may end up being all that stands between their people and being consigned to certain doom on Menagerie.
When humans unleash terrifying machines to wipe out her entire species, an ambitious young native must rally her people and lead them in the battle for survival.
When humans unleash terrifying machines to wipe out her entire species, an ambitious young native must rally her people and lead them in the battle for survival.
See lessIn the world of Remnant, the Faunus face oppression, deportation and subjugation at the hands of humanity. After a young Sienna Khan’s ambitious miners revolt ended in calamity she was pulled from the ruins by Kali of the resistance and her childhood friend, Ghira. With humanities war against the Faunus entering a new stage with Dr Merlot’s terrible machines of war, these young heroes may end up being all that stands between their people and being consigned to certain doom on Menagerie.
This isn't a logline - this is like the opening scroll in Star Wars. It's simply setting the scene. Check out the rules -?https://loglines.org/rules/When [inciting incident], [the protagonist] must [actions and goal] before [stakes]
This isn’t a logline – this is like the opening scroll in Star Wars. It’s simply setting the scene. Check out the rules -?https://loglines.org/rules/
When [inciting incident], [the protagonist] must [actions and goal] before [stakes]
See lessIn the distant future: When a naive teen joins the army, his over-protective biker brother must enlist, go through the harsh training, and find the boy so that he can get him out before they’re sent to battle against nightmarish aliens.
I wanna see a scene where the older brother is trying to find his sibling on the battle field against the aliens on the front line. Rather than trying to get him out before they fight, which has issues pointed out by Nir Shelter, he could request to go to the frontline where he knows his brother isRead more
I wanna see a scene where the older brother is trying to find his sibling on the battle field against the aliens on the front line. Rather than trying to get him out before they fight, which has issues pointed out by Nir Shelter, he could request to go to the frontline where he knows his brother is in a bid to save him. Maybe it would also be worth making the brothers have differing views on the war so that the (anti-war) older brother’s eventual arrival at his (pro-war) brother’s side has that much more impact – both for the audience and the younger brother.
When a naive teen enlists and is sent to the front line, his anti-war older brother signs up and volunteers for the front line so he can find his brother on the battlefield and protect him from the nightmarish aliens they’re fighting.
It’s a bit wordy and lacks emotional heft but you get the idea.?
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