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When a hit and run escalates into town hysteria, an ex-con and the man who accidentally killed his wife must work together when trapped in a house under siege by violent locals.
This is definitely getting more interesting. I think we need to be more specific about what event happens that directly leads to this scenario. The inciting incident needs to make us understand a) why the two men end up together in the first place and b) why the rest of the town are getting involvedRead more
This is definitely getting more interesting.
I think we need to be more specific about what event happens that directly leads to this scenario. The inciting incident needs to make us understand a) why the two men end up together in the first place and b) why the rest of the town are getting involved. All I’m wondering is why does the ex-con want to help the guy who killed his wife?
I mentioned Assault on Precinct 13 in a previous version. That’s a great example of how a siege scenario can start.
I really like the idea of the two men being enemies who have to work together. I think it’s a tried and tested idea but the circumstances need to be rock solid.
Just as an idea… could the ex-con be a cop instead who was there to arrest this guy for a hit and run, but as he goes to leave he gets a call telling him that the person killed in the hit and run was his wife. Instead of a siege, it becomes a hostage situation??I know this is veering off a bit from your original idea quite a bit though.
See lessAn ex-con, defending a reformed paedophile from an angry mob ? begins to doubt the man?s innocence.
We need to understand the ex-con's motive. I wonder if it would be worth, rather than a reformed paedophile, make him a wrongly accused paedophile. Through the events in the film, we can discover that he was actually let off on a technicality or something and the ex-con discovers that perhaps he didRead more
We need to understand the ex-con’s motive.
I wonder if it would be worth, rather than a reformed paedophile, make him a wrongly accused paedophile. Through the events in the film, we can discover that he was actually let off on a technicality or something and the ex-con discovers that perhaps he did do it after all.
I’m seeing an “Assault on Precinct 13” type film.
I think you’re right to drop the sister love story. Whilst it’s interesting, I ?don’t think it’s the A-story.
Can you put this into a more conventional format. Inciting incident, protagonist and goal?
See lessAn ex-con sets out to kill the reformed paedophile who he believes murdered his child, only to fall for the man’s protective sister.
Some of my comments on your previous version are now rendered redundant hahaha! What happens after he falls for the sister? What's his new goal? Like I mentioned in the previous version of this logline, is the relationship with the sister the A-story or the B-story? Maybe something like (from the MPRead more
Some of my comments on your previous version are now rendered redundant hahaha!
What happens after he falls for the sister? What’s his new goal? Like I mentioned in the previous version of this logline, is the relationship with the sister the A-story or the B-story?
Maybe something like (from the MPR):
but when he discovers the real truth the ex-con must protect the sex offender from a community that despises him.
My attempt isn’t perfect by any stretch … but I think since the story is primarily about the two convicts (which I think is great) it’s important to keep that front and centre.
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