1. Posted: October 15, 2021In:

    Hiding her psychopathic ego from family and co-workers an emergency department doctor who spends her days healing, and nights hurting, must play a complicated game of cat and mouse when the police start investigating her.

    mobiuswest Penpusher

    Thank you very much for this BeeZeeBee, this is truly helpful, I greatly appreciate the time and effort you've put into this feedback, and will do my best to apply it! Warmest regards Jim in Japan

    Thank you very much for this BeeZeeBee, this is truly helpful, I greatly appreciate the time and effort you’ve put into this feedback, and will do my best to apply it!

    Warmest regards

    Jim in Japan

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  2. Posted: October 14, 2021In:

    A failed private investigator becomes entangled in the disappearance of a 17-year-old girl to clear a large gambling debt.

    mobiuswest Penpusher

    Thank you very much for this! I like the telescoping of time and I agree the stakes need to be higher, I'll continue working on it. Oh and IM loving watching Danish crime television at the moment by the way, very influential in my writing! Thank you again Jim in Japan

    Thank you very much for this! I like the telescoping of time and I agree the stakes need to be higher, I’ll continue working on it. Oh and IM loving watching Danish crime television at the moment by the way, very influential in my writing!

    Thank you again

    Jim in Japan

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  3. Posted: September 7, 2021In:

    When two criminal old friends become enemies and seek advice, a clever gangster boss must hide himself to make them end each other, just to learn that time heals all wounds.

    mobiuswest Penpusher

    Is the lesson that time heals required in this logline?

    Is the lesson that time heals required in this logline?

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