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When a games tester encounters the virtual avatar of a dead friend in the real world, he must uncover a conspiracy that threatens our dimension.
So, he's encountering the avatar in the real world? Or is his friend dead in the real world while the avatar's still kicking around the game system? And no one "must uncover a conspiracy" -- if it isn't uncovered, no one knows about it, and therefore can't do anything about it. If he has to get to tRead more
So, he’s encountering the avatar in the real world? Or is his friend dead in the real world while the avatar’s still kicking around the game system? And no one “must uncover a conspiracy” — if it isn’t uncovered, no one knows about it, and therefore can’t do anything about it. If he has to get to the bottom of it, or expose it, that’s something?uncovering it would be the inciting incident.
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A suggestion not only of logline structure and detail but possible story elements: "An inexperienced small-town deputy must protect his community from an escaped murderer seeking revenge on those who captured him." It will serve your story to make the protagonist an underdog. Stack the deck againstRead more
A suggestion not only of logline structure and detail but possible story elements:
“An inexperienced small-town deputy must protect his community from an escaped murderer seeking revenge on those who captured him.”
It will serve your story to make the protagonist an underdog. Stack the deck against him. Think of a reason the Sheriff can’t handle it, like maybe he retired, or died, or moved, and no one’s replaced him yet, or the main character is the inexperienced new Sheriff?lots of ways to set this up.
Why not a female Sheriff? A young woman in law enforcement no one thinks can handle herself, and she manages to defeat the big bad monster guy against all odds? That’s a compelling story. Maybe your script has these elements already, but the purpose of the logline is to present these elements as quickly, simply, and clearly as possible.
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It isn't a compliment; it sounds like you're using the same idea without giving your characters any reason for their actions. Not an insult either, just questioning what the creative forces are.
It isn’t a compliment; it sounds like you’re using the same idea without giving your characters any reason for their actions. Not an insult either, just questioning what the creative forces are.
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