1. Posted: June 10, 2018In:

    After building a machine that can see the future, a young inventor and his friend use it to get rich, only to run afoul of gangsters.

    Adam Bernstr?m Samurai

    So, they use the machine to see into the future, on how to get rich? They use what they've learned to get the money, in the manner that they've seen, and that is a dishonest way, like theft or fraud, I assume? So it's a bootstrap paradox if I'm right. Nothing wrong with that, just as long as you havRead more

    So, they use the machine to see into the future, on how to get rich?

    They use what they’ve learned to get the money, in the manner that they’ve seen, and that is a dishonest way, like theft or fraud, I assume?

    So it’s a bootstrap paradox if I’m right. Nothing wrong with that, just as long as you have thought of the story logic.

    I’m guessing that the money belongs to the gangsters, then? So, if they can see how to get that money, they should be able to see that the gangsters won’t like it, right? But they do it anyway, or they are too hasty when they first use the machine and don’t see that the money belongs to gangsters?
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  2. Posted: May 9, 2018In:

    A man having an affair with a married woman discovers his wife is having an affair with her husband.

    Adam Bernstr?m Samurai

    Made me think of the stage play "The Virtuous Burglar" by Dario Fo. It has similar plot points, so you might want to check it out.

    Made me think of the stage play “The Virtuous Burglar” by Dario Fo. It has similar plot points, so you might want to check it out.

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  3. Posted: September 14, 2017In:

    A cloned Marine on shore leave is abducted by a spy who manipulates him into joining him on a covert operation on an enemy planet, to stop a rogue officer from starting an interstellar war.

    Adam Bernstr?m Samurai

    I thought it was clear that the Marine is the protagonist. Maybe if I don't mention in the logline who abducts the Marine, would that make it clearer? A cloned Marine on shore leave is abducted and into going on a covert operation on an enemy planet, to stop a rogue officer from starting an intersteRead more

    I thought it was clear that the Marine is the protagonist. Maybe if I don’t mention in the logline who abducts the Marine, would that make it clearer?

    A cloned Marine on shore leave is abducted and into going on a covert operation on an enemy planet, to stop a rogue officer from starting an interstellar war.

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