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Geeart1
Many good points made by Dkpough1 and DPG, worth studying this thread in more detail. However, I'd like to add a few more helpful pointers to the mix. You seem to be attached to this description:? "...The world is on the verge of making technological advances that will dramatically effect everythingRead more
Many good points made by Dkpough1 and DPG, worth studying this thread in more detail.
However, I’d like to add a few more helpful pointers to the mix. You seem to be attached to this description:? “…The world is on the verge of making technological advances that will dramatically effect everything and everyone worldwide…”
I presume you mean that scientists and organizations, worldwide, are researching and developing technologies that have the potential to wreak havoc. If this is the case, can you specify the one scientist, or one company, that’s developing the most dangerous technology? This could be an inciting incident for the MC to take action – stop the technological development.
On a side note, as there is a lack of detail specified in the logline and you seem to be still developing the concept as a whole, have you considered a different medium?
See lessFilm requires you work within specific conventions, and to your admission you’re still living the story, which means these conventions may not be observed in these early stages of development. Seeing as you also want the audience to grow with you as the story develops, I think this would make for a good web series. In a web seires you can explore the narrative in any way you see fit, and find an audience that would appreciate it.
When he discovers the CIA are controlling the public through the media, a sensationalist conspiracy vlogger must decipher their hidden messages to stop their nefarious plans.
Now day and age - post Wikileaks, exposing something seems rather tame an action for an MC. Is there something else he could do? In addition, if he was a journalist what's his obstacle from publicizing the material he finds? What's stopping him from achieving his goal?
Now day and age – post Wikileaks, exposing something seems rather tame an action for an MC. Is there something else he could do?
See lessIn addition, if he was a journalist what’s his obstacle from publicizing the material he finds? What’s stopping him from achieving his goal?
When a witch who is also a medical doctor is left with three days to raise his daughter from the dead, he enlists the help of an ameteur witch who has three days to save her mother from a deadly disease.
This seems to be an interesting mix of genres; Drama and super-natural - I'm interested. However, I don't think the story elements are sitting well together, not yet anyhow. The daughter's death is a good inciting incident, the goal is clear - bring her back. Here's the big 'but', BUT what else is aRead more
This seems to be an interesting mix of genres; Drama and super-natural – I’m interested.
However, I don’t think the story elements are sitting well together, not yet anyhow. The daughter’s death is a good inciting incident, the goal is clear – bring her back. Here’s the big ‘but’, BUT what else is at stake? Yes, the death of a child is painful, but it does happen. However, if she was killed by a malicious force and resurrecting her will help find a way to stop said force, the stakes are greater and the motivation just.
There is also no need to mention the ally amateur witch in the logline, that can be delegated to the synopsis or step out line.
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