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When unknowingly a lottery salesman sells a winning ticket, he continues his eternal battle to survive, living in his beach cavern, and crosses the path of an interesting fauna of people ? amongst whom the winner.
What is it the salesman wants? What must he get or else? A piece of writing that illustrates the irony of a situation in which a poor man makes other people rich on a regular basis, can work as a short story, novella or even a novel but not as a film. You would need a plot to substantiate a story foRead more
What is it the salesman wants? What must he get or else?
A piece of writing that illustrates the irony of a situation in which a poor man makes other people rich on a regular basis, can work as a short story, novella or even a novel but not as a film. You would need a plot to substantiate a story for a film, in other words, give the salesman a goal and obstacle to create drama and form a plot.
See lessWhen Western men suspiciously die in an peaceful Asian country the US counts as a key ally, an inexperienced American Embassy security official ruffles diplomatic feathers by claiming the country’s first serial killer has emerged and is probably an American.
Agreed with both the above comments, although the goal is largely hinted at - catching the killer and the opposition could be assumed - the Asian country's officials, this all needs to be disclosed in the logline.I'd say go one step further and put a face to the character - specify who it is that woRead more
Agreed with both the above comments, although the goal is largely hinted at – catching the killer and the opposition could be assumed – the Asian country’s officials, this all needs to be disclosed in the logline.
I’d say go one step further and put a face to the character – specify who it is that won’t let the official carry out the investigation. Could be a twist that the person who stands in his way is the killer or is somehow connected to the killer?
See lessAfter falling in love with his dream woman actress during a film collaboration, an agoraphobic writer struggles to attend a series of PR dates hoping to win her heart.
A boy meets girl story needs a good obstacle standing in the way of the lovers being together, his agoraphobia is a good first step and DPG's suggestion to add a rival is a good addition, but alas, I fear tis not enough. There have been many 'boy meets girl' stories over the years, since the basic cRead more
A boy meets girl story needs a good obstacle standing in the way of the lovers being together, his agoraphobia is a good first step and DPG’s suggestion to add a rival is a good addition, but alas, I fear tis not enough.
There have been many ‘boy meets girl’ stories over the years, since the basic concept is the same in all of them, what makes each one unique is the forces that keep the boy and girl apart. In this case, that would be his condition – an inner problem subjectively experienced by the character in a way that’s hidden from camera. For that to work, in my opinion, the circumstances testing his condition need to be pushed to the max, i.e she would need to be a porn-star or something to that effect. However, even then the mechanism of getting over the obstacle is an inner process for the MC and not very cinematic.
They would need more standing in their way. I can’t think of anything good right now but will try to come up with an example for a good obstacle to post, it won’t be your story but will demonstrate what I mean.
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