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Following the discovery of an enemy radar station?s location, a pilot?s brash behavior threatens his chance to destroy it and earn the respect he craves.
Loglines are made up of clear details. What is his goal? Is it respect? Is it to destroy the radar? Is it to save a squadron? Is it to beat the enemy? What is the inciting incident? What motivates him to have to achieve his goal? If it's related to the discovery of the radar, how does that motivateRead more
Loglines are made up of clear details.
What is his goal? Is it respect? Is it to destroy the radar? Is it to save a squadron? Is it to beat the enemy?
What is the inciting incident? What motivates him to have to achieve his goal? If it’s related to the discovery of the radar, how does that motivate him to achieve the goal?
Without a goal you have no plot, and the primary function of a logline is to describe a plot.
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Agreed with DPG - best to retain the nature of the character flaw throughout the story as an inner obstacle for the MC to overcome.I'll add that the premise sets the MC up for self-sacrifice, but the cause and effect connection is unclear.? How can the death of a few spies make the pilot NEED to savRead more
Agreed with DPG – best to retain the nature of the character flaw throughout the story as an inner obstacle for the MC to overcome.
I’ll add that the premise sets the MC up for self-sacrifice, but the cause and effect connection is unclear.? How can the death of a few spies make the pilot NEED to save his crew? This may be a plotting issue, but it isn’t clear in the logline. Could be that one of the spies was a close relative or friend of his and the personal connection motivated him to take action.
See lessSecondly, you state that he will destroy the enemy, do you mean the whole enemy army single handily? This is not plausible, perhaps you meant he singled out one enemy general or military unit as responsible for the killing.