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A high school dance challenges, socially awkward teen, to ask is jealous best friend for dancing lessons, after being asked out by the most popular girl in school.
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See less(Revision #4) England 1963. When two teenage sisters, sibling rivals, secure a recording contract that launches their singing career, they soon discover that the Rock?n Roll lifestyle is full of seductive excesses that may destroy their dream of fame and fortune.
This doesn't describe a story, rather a situation. A story needs a plot, and a plot needs an inciting event that motivates the main character to take action.What is the inciting event? Is it securing a recording contract? Is it discovering the Rock n' Roll lifestyle? If so, what does that mean in spRead more
This doesn’t describe a story, rather a situation. A story needs a plot, and a plot needs an inciting event that motivates the main character to take action.
What is the inciting event? Is it securing a recording contract? Is it discovering the Rock n’ Roll lifestyle? If so, what does that mean in specific terms? Do they start taking drugs, drinking, sleeping around and contracting an STD?
Whatever it is, the event has to be a single out of the ordinary incident, which motivates them to achieve a goal. As a logline needs to demonstrate a cause and effect relationship between the inciting event and goal, the goal can’t be random or unrelated.
Also, it’s hard enough writing a story about one protagonist, let alone two. therefore, it’s better for early-career writers to write a single protagonist story. Pick one of the two sisters, and focus the story around her.
Lastly, there have been many stories about the rise and fall of a musician/singer – some fictional some based on real people. What is it about this idea that makes it different to the plethora of other very similar stories?
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How is the goal description different from your original post? Regardless, it's not the twists and turns of the plot that you need to describe, instead, it's the end goal. How he gets to the goal (whether on his own volition or through someone else's encouragement) is less important.
How is the goal description different from your original post?
Regardless, it’s not the twists and turns of the plot that you need to describe, instead, it’s the end goal. How he gets to the goal (whether on his own volition or through someone else’s encouragement) is less important.
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