1. Posted: April 28, 2019In:

    Test-tube humans created by a Utopian civilization are unwittingly TV show contestants. One Uto woman tries to decimate members of a vile society, while showrunners manipulate a female Tuber to turn to terrorism.

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    This is confusing. Who is the main character? What does he or she want? And why?

    This is confusing.

    Who is the main character? What does he or she want? And why?

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  2. Posted: April 30, 2019In:

    After blowing his investor?s money in one drunken night, a socially awkward college student struggles to produce a movie with no budget or risk being found out.

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    So he brought the inciting event upon himself. The best inciting events are done to the MC, not by the MC. Perhaps it would be better if there is another character (bad guy or gal) who causes him to lose the investor's money?

    So he brought the inciting event upon himself. The best inciting events are done to the MC, not by the MC. Perhaps it would be better if there is another character (bad guy or gal) who causes him to lose the investor’s money?

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  3. Posted: April 29, 2019In:

    When an idealistic attorney discovers the man she freed from prison is a cold-blooded killer she chooses payback over ethics and mounts a stunning plan to put him back inside.

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    How does she discover that he is a killer? Does he kill someone she knows... best describe the specific event that motivates her.   How will she put him back inside? What she does will, to a large extent, help a producer envisage the main action in the film.

    How does she discover that he is a killer? Does he kill someone she knows… best describe the specific event that motivates her.

     

    How will she put him back inside? What she does will, to a large extent, help a producer envisage the main action in the film.

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