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When an entire town gets a virus from the trial of a brain-activated smart phone, a self-righteous hippy must stop the company and shut down the trial.
Agreed with DPG. In addition though, how is this story personal for the MC? Why is it so important for him to save the town? Is it his or her home town? Do his or her family? live there and they're trying to help them? Without making it personal the stakes seem very low.
Agreed with DPG.
In addition though, how is this story personal for the MC? Why is it so important for him to save the town? Is it his or her home town? Do his or her family? live there and they’re trying to help them?
Without making it personal the stakes seem very low.
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A character that doesn't change will be 2 dimensional and likely make for a boring journey. Your philosophical question aside, why would the audience care about a person doing a "bad" thing and not whom doesn't evolve during the story?
A character that doesn’t change will be 2 dimensional and likely make for a boring journey. Your philosophical question aside, why would the audience care about a person doing a “bad” thing and not whom doesn’t evolve during the story?
See lessWhen his mentor, a terrorist in disguise set’s him up with a bomb in a train terror attack, a Norwegian dropout, must evacuate the potential victims which will be killed in his name before the bomb kills them all.
Okay assuming that somehow he agreed to carry out a terror attack but then changed his mind, he still sounds like a foolish person not a naive one. There are some things that can pass for naivety but a terror attack is certainly not one, what did he think was going to happen?!!! The reason for him tRead more
Okay assuming that somehow he agreed to carry out a terror attack but then changed his mind, he still sounds like a foolish person not a naive one. There are some things that can pass for naivety but a terror attack is certainly not one, what did he think was going to happen?!!!
The reason for him to change his mind is unclear, this needs to be elaborated on as it tells the audience that he has learned his lesson and is a better person for it. Secondly, if he was part of the plan all along then the event that convinces him to do the right thing and not kill people sounds like the inciting incident and therefore should come at the end of act one. Albeit early in the plot for him to overcome his flaw, I believe that in this particular case it can still work, and may benefit the story.
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