Opinions about the main stream entertainment industry are widely varied especially when voiced from different parts of the world. Therefore personal opinions about the behavior of corporations is somewhat unrelated to the current subject.

Formulaic or not ultimately a logline will be used to either sell a script or structure a story. It must transmit the crucial components of the story in an easy to understand and therefor a known manner which means that by definition it has to follow a formula in order to achieve either goal.

Many writers like to criticize the main stream Hollywood industry for its corporate approach. It is important to remember that film making conventions used in indi and studio productions alike were established in Hollywood. These have worked for almost 80 years and deliver more stories world wide than most other industries to date and for a reason. The changing distribution models will change this paradigm to a degree and present opportunities for more to partake in the process but the industry conventions will remain mostly intact.

Story conventions have evolved over time but still remain true to their ancient Greek origin regardless the changing distribution models and industry conventions.

One fact remains above all; story is king and plot his queen. No matter your delivery platform or development process your logline must be structured accordingly.

All previous comments still apply.

As the previous comments have suggested this logline lacks a clear MC and goal. I would add that it is too long and has far to much detail of the setting and events in the story that don’t really need to be included in the logline.

Really depends on who is the MC that will determine the re structuring of this loglie.

Hope this helps.