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The day before Christmas, an unadventurous, spoiled young boy gets kidnapped. He escapes with the help from a girl who has facts that will help him find his beloved father, but there is a price. He must first recover something that is precious to her before Christmas.
The elements in the V2 logline don't seem connected in a cause and effect relationship to each other. His learning of the possibility that his father is dead seems semi related to learning that his uncle wants to take possession of the property. A good inciting incident should cause the main actionRead more
The elements in the V2 logline don’t seem connected in a cause and effect relationship to each other. His learning of the possibility that his father is dead seems semi related to learning that his uncle wants to take possession of the property.
A good inciting incident should cause the main action the MC will take throughout the story. In my mind learning that his father may be dead would cause him to want to find him or the body not stop the uncle.
See lessThe day before Christmas, an unadventurous, spoiled young boy gets kidnapped. He escapes with the help from a girl who has facts that will help him find his beloved father, but there is a price. He must first recover something that is precious to her before Christmas.
The elements in the V2 logline don't seem connected in a cause and effect relationship to each other. His learning of the possibility that his father is dead seems semi related to learning that his uncle wants to take possession of the property. A good inciting incident should cause the main actionRead more
The elements in the V2 logline don’t seem connected in a cause and effect relationship to each other. His learning of the possibility that his father is dead seems semi related to learning that his uncle wants to take possession of the property.
A good inciting incident should cause the main action the MC will take throughout the story. In my mind learning that his father may be dead would cause him to want to find him or the body not stop the uncle.
See lessAs a fascist state that controls the GMO tech that feeds the population seeks to secure its hold on power, the poorer farmers and climate refugees in the south embark on a secret mission to get back natural seeds from a heavily fortified island.
It's not clear who or what the story is about from the logline. Also vague descriptions such as "...seeks to secure its hold on power," don't describe a clear visual danger because depends on the type of fascist state this could be interpreted in many different ways. As previously mentioned who is tRead more
It’s not clear who or what the story is about from the logline.
Also vague descriptions such as “…seeks to secure its hold on power,” don’t describe a clear visual danger because depends on the type of fascist state this could be interpreted in many different ways.
As previously mentioned who is the MC? What is the goal? What is the obstacle? and what re the stakes?
Hope this helps.
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