Thanks guys, good to get your perspective on this idea.

From the comments above it seams as if the logline infers that the MC’s external goal is trying to cure the kids medical conditions so the logline needs to be changed as this is not the case at all.

The MC does not think he can cure cancer with laughter. The goal of a clown doctor (I have an actor friend who works as one) is not to cure children but keep their spirits up and make their time in the hospital less miserable, which is what the MC is trying to do.

I have changed the internal goal for the MC to; learn to let go of the past, and was very glad DPG to read that you thought the same about the journey.

Very good suggestion about referencing the 5 stages of grief will dedicate time to researching them and see how they can be reflected in the story.

New version of the logline:
When a young terminal patient asks a clown doctor for help, the clown doctor, a long time grieving father, must learn to let go of the past if he is to keep on helping sick children be happy.

Does this help clear up the MC’s internal and external goals?

Thanks, Nir.