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An undercover cop from a distant galaxy fights to save the human race and the woman he loves from an alien invasion set to destroy earth.
As a re post of a previous idea this reads better and smother so definitely an improvement. But this is still the same details relating to the same characters. I find that only when a logline re write changes the synopsis of a story then it can be considered a new draft of the logline. By this I meaRead more
As a re post of a previous idea this reads better and smother so definitely an improvement.
But this is still the same details relating to the same characters. I find that only when a logline re write changes the synopsis of a story then it can be considered a new draft of the logline.
By this I mean if it’s the same character with the same description taking the same action without any new motivation or newly described obstacle the changes made are cosmetic to the wording of the logline.
In this case the story is obviously a spec for epic scifi adventure and a fairly generic sounding one at that.
In my mind whilst this version of the lognline reads better because it is shorter it still needs a good inciting incident, an Antagonist and a flaw for the MC.
Its with these that you can make this a unique story about a unique character.
Hope this helps.
See lessAn undercover cop from a distant galaxy fights to save the human race and the woman he loves from an alien invasion set to destroy earth.
As a re post of a previous idea this reads better and smother so definitely an improvement. But this is still the same details relating to the same characters. I find that only when a logline re write changes the synopsis of a story then it can be considered a new draft of the logline. By this I meaRead more
As a re post of a previous idea this reads better and smother so definitely an improvement.
But this is still the same details relating to the same characters. I find that only when a logline re write changes the synopsis of a story then it can be considered a new draft of the logline.
By this I mean if it’s the same character with the same description taking the same action without any new motivation or newly described obstacle the changes made are cosmetic to the wording of the logline.
In this case the story is obviously a spec for epic scifi adventure and a fairly generic sounding one at that.
In my mind whilst this version of the lognline reads better because it is shorter it still needs a good inciting incident, an Antagonist and a flaw for the MC.
Its with these that you can make this a unique story about a unique character.
Hope this helps.
See lessWhen well-mannered Japanese woman notices a an enormous boogger hanging out of a nose of her American date, she has to make a tough choice either to tell him and jeopardize brewing romance or endure in disgust.
This sounds like a setup for a gag as it doesn't read like there is enough in this idea for more than a couple of minutes of a comedy. So as a 2 minute sketch sure this sounds like it could work pending the execution but not for a longer plot than that.
This sounds like a setup for a gag as it doesn’t read like there is enough in this idea for more than a couple of minutes of a comedy.
So as a 2 minute sketch sure this sounds like it could work pending the execution but not for a longer plot than that.
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