I agree with jamesmichael; it feels like “Project X” meets “Dawn of the Dead” is just the kind of thing that hollywood would eat up right now, but the wording of your logline feels clunky. Take it back to basics; inciting incident (zombie apocalypse), flawed protagonist (? college student), goal (raise funds … can you be specific here? He needs $50,000 for a ticket on an “ark” or something like that?), antagonist, stakes.

Logically … if people know it’s a zombie apocalypse, and survival is people’s objective … why do people turn up to his party and not just flee or save themselves? What if the goal was not to simply save himself … it was to restart the human race by way of rampant procreation? If I’m reading the genre right, this would fit the premise relatively well?

The heart attack and the pregnancy are two different inciting incidents; and it’s making the story unclear. I’d probably just mention that the ad exec is “recovering from a heart attack”, and get it out of the way early, and keep the pregnancy announcement as your inciting incident.

So … what does your protagonist actually DO to reconnect? Does he just try to insert himself into the lives of his family? Does he institute a total lockdown? Does he get a part time job at the fast food store that his daughter works at? I want to understand what your protagonist will be doing through the majority of the movie, and I want to know that it offers the opportunity for interesting drama. At the moment, the film comes across as an American Beauty style offbeat dark dramedy … if that’s wrong, then you need to find a way to clarify through the language you use.

Also, this premise feels like it needs a time limit. Reconnecting with the family is a bit too vague of a goal; this could take decades. I want to hear something along the lines of:

“After learning his estranged daughter is pregnant and plans to elope with her boyfriend, a high-strung ad exec takes a job at the burger joint she manages in order to convince her to stay.”

Finally, and this is just a story thought and not on the logline; my first thought went to “what if your protagonist, the father’s, first goal is to get to know his daughter enough to convince her to have an abortion.” It’s still quite a selfish thing to do … and then at your midpoint, when it gets revealed that this is his goal, his daughter is furious and they end up even more estranged than they were to begin with. So the second half becomes about getting to know her … simply because he cares, and making his peace with his daughter having a child of her own.

I think you have work to do on this logline, but it’s got my mind churning, and that’s a good thing.