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To stop her ex-husband from stealing the Mona Lisa, a world-class cat burglar turned security expert must illegally install her own security in the Louvre.
The entire second act is her figuring out better security and then illegally installing it without the Louvre?s permission or knowledge? That sounds boring. I don't want to see an hour of a woman trying to install security in the Lourve... I want to see a cat and mouse game with the ex husband. ThatRead more
The entire second act is her figuring out better security and then illegally installing it without the Louvre?s permission or knowledge? That sounds boring.
I don’t want to see an hour of a woman trying to install security in the Lourve… I want to see a cat and mouse game with the ex husband. That’s your hook… and the installing security thing actually diminishes it. Anyone else think this is the hook?
See lessVivienne's travels through her alternate realities and discovers different lives, loves and losses. Now she risks losing everything in order to have it all.
I'm getting a "Time Traveller's wife" vibe, but I need to know more about the story. Phrases like "discovers different lives, loves and losses" and "she risks losing everything in order to have it all" are too vague. What is Vivienne's occupation, strength and flaw? What is Vivienne's main goal, andRead more
I’m getting a “Time Traveller’s wife” vibe, but I need to know more about the story. Phrases like “discovers different lives, loves and losses” and “she risks losing everything in order to have it all” are too vague.
What is Vivienne’s occupation, strength and flaw? What is Vivienne’s main goal, and what’s stopping her from getting it? What happens if she doesn’t get it?
Check out the “How to Write it?” section of https://loglines.org/howto/ if you haven’t already done so.
See lessTwo men hunt the rogue crocodile that killed both their wives. One wants to save it, the other wants it dead!
Cool, now you have a main character. But try to sum it up in one sentence. A logline should be around 25 words or under... Check out the "How to Write it?" section of https://loglines.org/howto/ if you haven't already done so. I don't like the "save it" guy being the main character. The crocodile isRead more
Cool, now you have a main character. But try to sum it up in one sentence. A logline should be around 25 words or under…
Check out the “How to Write it?” section of https://loglines.org/howto/ if you haven’t already done so.
I don’t like the “save it” guy being the main character. The crocodile is clearly dangerous and taking human lives. Saving a killing monster because your crazy dying wife made you promise to sounds like something a “screwed in the head” villain would do, not a hero.
The “kill it” guy’s motivation is more credible and relatable. I understand the need to avenge the wife he loved, and to stop the monster taking more lives.
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