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A lazy but gifted high-school kid blackmails his adulterous parents and uses the money to start his own business, in an attempt to woo the girl of his dreams.
You guys are both right. Because in reality the girl plays a minor part, it's just adding her gives the story some direction. In reality he NEEDS to stop being lazy and use his talents to do something with his life. He decides to start his own business, but needs start-up money. The inciting incidenRead more
You guys are both right. Because in reality the girl plays a minor part, it’s just adding her gives the story some direction.
In reality he NEEDS to stop being lazy and use his talents to do something with his life. He decides to start his own business, but needs start-up money.
The inciting incident is discovering his parents cheating. So he decides to use this to get that money (after asking them normally).
His goal is really to start his own business and make money, but that seems like a vague goal to put in a logline. So to say he’s doing it to impress a girl seems to add an endpoint. The reality of it is that it changes vastly during the movie, but that can’t all be included in the logline.
Do you guys think I should focus on the starting a business, rather than the girl?
See lessA lazy but gifted high-school kid blackmails his adulterous parents and uses the money to start his own business, in an attempt to woo the girl of his dreams.
You guys are both right. Because in reality the girl plays a minor part, it's just adding her gives the story some direction. In reality he NEEDS to stop being lazy and use his talents to do something with his life. He decides to start his own business, but needs start-up money. The inciting incidenRead more
You guys are both right. Because in reality the girl plays a minor part, it’s just adding her gives the story some direction.
In reality he NEEDS to stop being lazy and use his talents to do something with his life. He decides to start his own business, but needs start-up money.
The inciting incident is discovering his parents cheating. So he decides to use this to get that money (after asking them normally).
His goal is really to start his own business and make money, but that seems like a vague goal to put in a logline. So to say he’s doing it to impress a girl seems to add an endpoint. The reality of it is that it changes vastly during the movie, but that can’t all be included in the logline.
Do you guys think I should focus on the starting a business, rather than the girl?
See lessA lazy but gifted high-school kid blackmails his adulterous parents and uses the money to start his own business, in an attempt to woo the girl of his dreams.
Hi Craig, thanks for the comment. Yes, both parents without the other one knowing. I was thinking of changing gifted but lazy ? to brainy slacker. But I?m not sure if it?s any better. And changing girl of his dreams to crush, or sweetheart. I don?t think I?ll give any more details on her as she doesRead more
Hi Craig, thanks for the comment.
Yes, both parents without the other one knowing.
I was thinking of changing gifted but lazy ? to brainy slacker. But I?m not sure if it?s any better.
And changing girl of his dreams to crush, or sweetheart. I don?t think I?ll give any more details on her as she doesn?t play that much of a role as a character. She?s just the treasure at the end. It?s more about him getting off his ass and doing something that makes him a better person.
And yes, Good Charlotte summed it up well. She goes with the rich guy with the nice car, so he believes that?s what he needs.
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