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When slobby Jim and well-groomed Leo move into student housing together, their initial personality clash evolves into an unlikely friendship as they share the triumphs and humiliations of life in Sydney.
Knowing nothing about your series, I really think it will be easier to find conflict if you introduce some sort of antagonist element. Like for example: a notorious principal who tries to expel one of the characters because of some personal gain. This conflict who seem to be in Jims favour (to get rRead more
Knowing nothing about your series, I really think it will be easier to find conflict if you introduce some sort of antagonist element. Like for example: a notorious principal who tries to expel one of the characters because of some personal gain. This conflict who seem to be in Jims favour (to get rid of the incompatible room-mate Leo) materialise in the opposite when Jim finds out that he will loose his new found girl (that of course is only available via Leo). Or something.
So, my idea here is to first throw conflict between Jim and Leo (they should start out very incompatible), but then give an outer conflict (principal or competing students) that forces the two to connect and help each other. Some stake need to be present like get expelled or running out of funds etc. If the obstacle is coming to terms with adult life, what is that? Could you give an example?
See lessWhen slobby Jim and well-groomed Leo move into student housing together, their initial personality clash evolves into an unlikely friendship as they share the triumphs and humiliations of life in Sydney.
Knowing nothing about your series, I really think it will be easier to find conflict if you introduce some sort of antagonist element. Like for example: a notorious principal who tries to expel one of the characters because of some personal gain. This conflict who seem to be in Jims favour (to get rRead more
Knowing nothing about your series, I really think it will be easier to find conflict if you introduce some sort of antagonist element. Like for example: a notorious principal who tries to expel one of the characters because of some personal gain. This conflict who seem to be in Jims favour (to get rid of the incompatible room-mate Leo) materialise in the opposite when Jim finds out that he will loose his new found girl (that of course is only available via Leo). Or something.
So, my idea here is to first throw conflict between Jim and Leo (they should start out very incompatible), but then give an outer conflict (principal or competing students) that forces the two to connect and help each other. Some stake need to be present like get expelled or running out of funds etc. If the obstacle is coming to terms with adult life, what is that? Could you give an example?
See lessWhen slobby Jim and well-groomed Leo move into student housing together, their initial personality clash evolves into an unlikely friendship as they share the triumphs and humiliations of life in Sydney.
Your logline seems to be missing an antagonist or is one of the characters the real protagonist? Also you may consider to skip the names of the characters, since that does not give us any extra information. Then, what is their goal, and what is at stake? You should probably have something that forceRead more
Your logline seems to be missing an antagonist or is one of the characters the real protagonist?
See lessAlso you may consider to skip the names of the characters, since that does not give us any extra information.
Then, what is their goal, and what is at stake? You should probably have something that force these two to be together – maybe they have to score a hard exam or something?