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when power hungry aliens close in on earth, one of the worlds most skilled gamers must play a game of five card poker with them in order to save humanity
Interesting concept, plus it can be shot in a single room. Not sure if you have to say five-card poker since traditional poker is played with five cards, so you can cut it to just poker. If there is anything to change in the logline, perhaps the description, 'one of the world's most skilled gamers'Read more
Interesting concept, plus it can be shot in a single room.
Not sure if you have to say five-card poker since traditional poker is played with five cards, so you can cut it to just poker.
If there is anything to change in the logline, perhaps the description, ‘one of the world’s most skilled gamers’ is a bit long, why not, ‘the world’s best gamer,’ or ‘world champion poker player’?
But these are minute details. The logline is solid if you don’t want to change it.
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What is the forward story? Half the logline is backstory. What does her Nemesis (Brother) want? What are the stakes? What must the lead do to stop him? Example: "When her evil brother attempts to crash the moon into the earth, a disgraced retired superhero must rally all the meta-humans in order toRead more
What is the forward story? Half the logline is backstory.
What does her Nemesis (Brother) want?
What are the stakes?
What must the lead do to stop him?
Example: “When her evil brother attempts to crash the moon into the earth, a disgraced retired superhero must rally all the meta-humans in order to defeat his dastardly world-destroying plans.”
See lessStripped of his license a disgraced ER doctor running from his past reinvents himself in Japan only to be lured deep into a community with a violent secret where he must solve an unspeakable crime.
"Stripped of his license, a disgraced ER doctor reinvents himself in (Morrocco) where he is drawn deep into the criminal underworld." (With seemingly no way out) ------------------------------------------------------------ 1: I would be specific with the country, I just put Morrocco but it could beRead more
“Stripped of his license, a disgraced ER doctor reinvents himself in (Morrocco) where he is drawn deep into the criminal underworld.” (With seemingly no way out)
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1: I would be specific with the country, I just put Morrocco but it could be any country, Brazil, South Africa, Vietnam because specific is better than vague.
2: “Shocking consequences” doesn’t really tell us anything, I would leave it out or name the specific event, however, the event sounds like a plot twist, not an inciting incident so I just dropped it in my example.
Hope this helped
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