1. Posted: August 17, 2018In:

    After giving nourishment and shelter to a wounded, fugitive vampire, a love-struck yet timid teen joins her quest: to assassinate her Sire before he starts a vampiric civil war.

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    Richiev Singularity

    Just curious:Does two-thirds of the movie take place on the run and the assassination takes place?in the final actorIs the failed attempt to run the inciting incident which sets up the main story about the assassination of the vampire leader.

    Just curious:
    Does two-thirds of the movie take place on the run and the assassination takes place?in the final act
    or
    Is the failed attempt to run the inciting incident which sets up the main story about the assassination of the vampire leader.

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  2. Posted: August 16, 2018In:

    When a son is chosen to take over his father’s billion dollar company, he must adjust to the world of business and his newfound power.

    Richiev Singularity

    Whose son? What business? What is the lead character's goal? Also, why is the son chosen, why hasn't he been groomed since birth to manage the company? Answering these questions in your logline will improve it greatly

    Whose son?
    What business?
    What is the lead character’s goal?

    Also, why is the son chosen, why hasn’t he been groomed since birth to manage the company?

    Answering these questions in your logline will improve it greatly

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  3. Posted: August 14, 2018In:

    “When her domineering boyfriend forces her to join the army the Potomac with him, a meek farmgirl fights for the North and for her relationship as she succeeds in battle just as his cowardice grows.”

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    Richiev Singularity

    Thanks guys! I knew there was a reason to write a logline first. You are right, she must sign up of her own free will. Her choice not a situation forced upon her.

    Thanks guys! I knew there was a reason to write a logline first.

    You are right, she must sign up of her own free will. Her choice not a situation forced upon her.

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